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TwistedSomnus
TwistedSomnusLv153yr
2021-01-12 03:03

This story is direct, concise, and focused. The writer writes every sentence with a purpose. These are usually strong elements of writing, and most stories fail in these areas, but not in this case. This story is like pure alcohol, it does it's job so well there's no room for flavor. I'm early in the story, so things may change later on, but in the beginning the main character never really has time to leave an impression. He does things, and things happen, but no particular attention is given to him as a character. Because of this, I lost interest in him.

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Springs_Halo
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He gets better in later chaps. Thanks for the review

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TheArcher7
TheArcher7Lv12

All around this story is average. It's a cultivation novel with typical cliches and a few typical features, but I haven't seen anything new yet. Sometimes that's good, because you just want to have an enjoyable read, and indeed some people love how "fast paced" the novel is, but not me. The grammar is near flawless but the author's command of the English language is lacking. Moments seem to drag on forever and the writing seems to circle itself in a repetitive manner. These things happen mostly due to a bland, unvarried word choice. For readers like me, with higher expectations, I'm simply bored from reading it. Plot-wise the story is average too. The world building doesnt seem very deep and there aren't very many characters, as if the author doesnt want to put the work in to making a large world. The time period and cultures aren't established (with either the use of objects, technology, or references). Nothing. Furthermore the magic system is lacking. Even by chapter 30, when the MC has broken through two planes, I still dont know what the planes are, what the consequences of cultivating improperly are, what the elements are, or how the elements are used (in combat) ect. Even by chapter 30 there has been only one fight and it was totally lackluster. Missed opportunity for demonstrating the magic system in action. Over all I would say average. I am still very impressed with the grammar, but there's unfortunately no character or charm to the writing. So even though it isn't distracting from the story, it is still detracting. Author should go back to rework scenes and actively use synonyms. Every adjective in a chapter should be unique. Every verb should be specifically chosen to best describe an action.

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