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OnlyMesha
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2021-04-13 05:19

No harem? What disgrace!!!! You should make a harem flat 1 star!! You mongrels! Lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol lol

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TediousHamster
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Lol

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Janeth_Candia
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No es necesario tener harén para hacerlo divertido con tal la historia sea entretenida

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Harvald
HarvaldLv5

The writing quality for fanfic is pretty high with only minor errors and the author even uses good spacing and I am not forced to read a block text. The only thing which I find slightly annoying is that he uses ALLCAPS for shouting. What I am ambivalent about is his use of many comic sounds, which is classic Deadpool and on one hand, a feature that shouldn't be missing, but I personally find a tad annoying in text, not in comics. For a person, without too much comic knowledge I can't say too much about the author's portrayal of Deadpool nor DC except that from my point of view he feels like Deadpool should act, and from what I've read in second-hand reports the only consistency in Deadpools comic career has been inconsistency between authors, which should therefore cover any minor discrepancies if they are even there. It is too soon for world-building or story development to say anything about it for now, except that it seems promising. Update frequency was vaguely described in the author's note and I personally would like specification even if it was just an "updates are irregular" notice. Helps the reader know it isn't abandoned if there is some break so they don't get antsy and the author saves himself self-imposed pressure, which I believe heightens the chance of an author to pick it up again after a break. The 4th wall breaks in this story are done really well and even I as a person who tends to dislike them was rather entertained with them. My other review towards the "no harem" tag factors into this one in so far that I was more lenient with the points. P.s. For those who say I shouldn't throw stones here's a little self-reflection. If I'd rate my own private attempts in creative writing they would be all flat One Star(and not because of tags) maybe 1.6 Stars if I gave myself pity points for grammar and writing. I'm just harsh with points to everyone including myself. P.p.s Do you guys know how tedious it is to write this with a broken laptop keyboard(the right side only works with brute force)

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