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LightningCatThief
LightningCatThiefLv123yr
2021-02-26 23:13

This is one of those novels where the blurb is bad, but the story is even worse. The MC has a very unlikable personality, which does not fit his background. He was Reincarnated into a 3 year old orphan, but even after 10+ years he is still not used to his new life, is biased, sees others/natives as uncultured and acts like a visitor instead of someone born there. He is extremely childish and bratty towards his master who raised him, but we as readers are supposed to treat him like an ***** with mad deductive and people skills. I honestly feel like this is a badly done novel about a virtual reality game player who went back in time. There is no sense of excitement or suspens, the MC is unreasonably capable because he has seen it all. Of course he has not, but the sense of danger or cation is completely missing. The MC does not fit into the world the author tries to create and so it warps around him until there is nothing that makes sense anymore. Let me give an example. Imagine you race is getting attacked for no reason (in your mind) and you get sent to the enemy recruitment camp to scare of as many as you can. Sending a young and beautiful woman who is naive and incompetent is probably not anyone's first choice, but circumstances. Oh and killing is a nono, because they are still not murderers, only willingly trying to become murderers(your mind). So you/she fail your/her task, would you/her: a) Leave and hide to continue the mission with other targets. b) Make an excuse, like pretending to be part of the examination. c) Deal with the problem temporarily (knock unconscious, sleep spell etc.) or permanently. d) Just leave to report back. Or e) Tell your target about your mission, the reason behind your mission, about the philosophy behind your actions, part of your life story and background. Thereby risking exposure of yourself and possible companions. And accept the targets offer of food. 3 guesses which happens in this novel, and the first 2 don't count. So far every character in this novel lacks common sense and basic logical thinking. Which is even worse for the MC because he is supposedly a very scientific kind of guy. He is searching for answers in a supposedly scientific way, but can not even observe the reality he is in. I can't claim that the idea or the concept behind this novel is anything noteworthy, but it is so badly executed that I still feel really bad about it.

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ThePotatoKing
ThePotatoKingLv14

are you being sarcastic and trolling on purpose, or did you not read it properly... why do I feel like we have read completely different stories... first if all you said he is bratty toward his master like srsly dude what the heck, his master is a drunk fellow who gambled himself Into debt and spends his time in brothels and casinos. that aside that is just what their relationship is you will see it later on. next the female demon doesn't represent the demon species, she is a loner who was raised by a human please read the story before commenting. she was acting in her own not on the orders of some force.

Bsnsnd
BsnsndLv4

Lol even I who skim reading this novel through 20 chapter understand that the fox is doing something by her own rather than being sent there by whoever this reviewer imagine 🤣🤣🤣🤣

ThePotatoKing:are you being sarcastic and trolling on purpose, or did you not read it properly... why do I feel like we have read completely different stories... first if all you said he is bratty toward his master like srsly dude what the heck, his master is a drunk fellow who gambled himself Into debt and spends his time in brothels and casinos. that aside that is just what their relationship is you will see it later on. next the female demon doesn't represent the demon species, she is a loner who was raised by a human please read the story before commenting. she was acting in her own not on the orders of some force.
LightningCatThief
LightningCatThiefLv12

There is more than one way to see things and I am sure I have reviewed the right novel. But I will try to give a better explanation for my perspective. MC, supposedly ***** in mind if not in body, has been raised by another ***** with no blood relation or any other kind of obligation for what I'd probably more than 10 years. Effort, time and money have been spent to help another in his time of desperate need, which the MC as a former ***** should be able to comprehend. For more than a decade. This is debt that is almost impossible to repay. And what does the MC do? He treats his benefactor like a waste/drunk/gambler and looks down on him, not only with words and action, but also in his private thoughts. He has no right to judge. He himself is far from perfect and spending a little time and money to insure your benefactors freedom should not be to much in this case. Maybe others will think differently, but the MC attitude of looking down on everyone is a major problem for me. As to the demon girl, if she really has no contact with other demons and is raised by a human her behaviour makes perfect sense, NOT. She either is there against her caretakers wishes, so of course she will leave as much evidence of her rule breaking as possible, like exposing her face to and talking with a supposed future enemy. But that would fit with an IQ of less than 10, because there are few ways to die faster than going to an enemy's camp alone. Or she is there on orders/as a test, which she is guaranteed to fail spectaculary. Either way, a very bad introduction to a cardboard cutout of a character. I haven't read the whole thing so my impressions might be wrong, but I don't think the MC is supposed to be a sociopath or extremely unsympathetic. It does not fit the narrative so far. This discrepancy disturbs me every time I manage to immerse myself in the story and is frankly a very bad start. If a webnovel author can not capture my attention in 20 chapters there is no way I will spend money to support his drafts.

ThePotatoKing:are you being sarcastic and trolling on purpose, or did you not read it properly... why do I feel like we have read completely different stories... first if all you said he is bratty toward his master like srsly dude what the heck, his master is a drunk fellow who gambled himself Into debt and spends his time in brothels and casinos. that aside that is just what their relationship is you will see it later on. next the female demon doesn't represent the demon species, she is a loner who was raised by a human please read the story before commenting. she was acting in her own not on the orders of some force.
ThePotatoKing
ThePotatoKingLv14

first if all teh mc isn't really that bratty towards his master, if you read on you will realise it's now of a tsundere type relationship and he really does care about him. After the test ends the first thing he does is rush back to save his master. I mean haven't you ever read if a similar master-disciple relationship. The only reason he is being bratty with his master is because he feels close to him. You do not be bratty towards a person you don't care about. Also even though he has transmigrated his circumstances are a bit different from normal cars as be doesn't remember how he got here, it's as if he just realized one day that oh, he is in a other body in another world. Next about the demon girl, I will go into spoilers bit here goes. she was a demon born on the wild , she was raised by a human who had defected from the committee or whatever. Later on the person who raised her gets captured and she is trying to get revenge by any means possible. Yes... she has really low IQ and there is absolutely no way what she was doing would have any real chance of success and impact. She had no one to really in and was just left alone so she was just grasping on straws.

LightningCatThief:There is more than one way to see things and I am sure I have reviewed the right novel. But I will try to give a better explanation for my perspective. MC, supposedly ***** in mind if not in body, has been raised by another ***** with no blood relation or any other kind of obligation for what I'd probably more than 10 years. Effort, time and money have been spent to help another in his time of desperate need, which the MC as a former ***** should be able to comprehend. For more than a decade. This is debt that is almost impossible to repay. And what does the MC do? He treats his benefactor like a waste/drunk/gambler and looks down on him, not only with words and action, but also in his private thoughts. He has no right to judge. He himself is far from perfect and spending a little time and money to insure your benefactors freedom should not be to much in this case. Maybe others will think differently, but the MC attitude of looking down on everyone is a major problem for me. As to the demon girl, if she really has no contact with other demons and is raised by a human her behaviour makes perfect sense, NOT. She either is there against her caretakers wishes, so of course she will leave as much evidence of her rule breaking as possible, like exposing her face to and talking with a supposed future enemy. But that would fit with an IQ of less than 10, because there are few ways to die faster than going to an enemy's camp alone. Or she is there on orders/as a test, which she is guaranteed to fail spectaculary. Either way, a very bad introduction to a cardboard cutout of a character. I haven't read the whole thing so my impressions might be wrong, but I don't think the MC is supposed to be a sociopath or extremely unsympathetic. It does not fit the narrative so far. This discrepancy disturbs me every time I manage to immerse myself in the story and is frankly a very bad start. If a webnovel author can not capture my attention in 20 chapters there is no way I will spend money to support his drafts.
Shootupthesky
ShootuptheskyLv4

Your reading is very superficial and not an authentic review at all. You reviewing ability is trash and should not be allowed to comment.

LightningCatThief
LightningCatThiefLv12

Dear Friend, I do hope you realise that anyone can see every comment you have left on this site by selecting your profile. My advise, stay with your fetish theories of poor taste and leave the intellectual battles to those who have the necessary weapons and skills.

Shootupthesky:Your reading is very superficial and not an authentic review at all. You reviewing ability is trash and should not be allowed to comment.
Shootupthesky
ShootuptheskyLv4

Not getting what are you trying to point out here. Maybe you should follow your own advice first before preaching to your betters.

LightningCatThief:Dear Friend, I do hope you realise that anyone can see every comment you have left on this site by selecting your profile. My advise, stay with your fetish theories of poor taste and leave the intellectual battles to those who have the necessary weapons and skills.
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