I think this is a really good idea BUT this could have been wayy better And i understand that you wrote this simply for fun but if you ever decide to rewrite or such you can use these advices 1 - Too OP In nordic mythology (real one) Thor was able to lift jormungandr which was said to coil around earth and in the MCU version even the weakest thor is a city - nation level threat you could have simply sealed his powers and make him get used to his powers bit by bit thus unlocking it 2 - Too abrupt From the readers viewpoint Thor suddenly got chucked into this world And we have not been able to see him grow develop relationships and become more mature as years go by 3 - Relationships Ragnar was a man of many faults in the show he had his ups and downs like most humans but he wasn't to the point of being bitter even when his wife left him he was a viking and a leader i think that the characters are not much thought put into it not very fleshed out for example even if ragnar was a bitter man he would have to recognize the strength and benefit Thor brings and remember Ragnar only became the Jarl because THE Jarl was making trouble for him Aside from that it's decent not many grammar mistakes readable a bit eye catching definetly could be more polished 5/10

this fic is actually really good ngl. the only bad thing is that we aint getting minimum of 10 chaps a day but like ill handle it. noice noice noice noice no

El fanfic esta bueno. Solo que apresuraste mucho en el primer capitulo rencarna y en el 3 ya esta planeando atacar Inglaterra las cosas van demasiado rapido no hay casi desarrollo de personajes ni desarrollo de fondo

Im trying to put all the constructive criticism i can here so dont take it personally. First the begining was way to abrubt and by that i mean the part where he was put in the world because you made it to where he has a reputation and relation with people but we as reader arent really informed of although you did make some comments on it. Baically in my opinion the begining would have flowed better if you made him younger and did some timeskips instead of just throwing him there. my secons problem would be his powers like im fine with overpowered but you shouldve done it in a way that at least explaine it better. theres a lot more i could comment on but im not a author my self and i honestly would probably do worse all i can do is make a review on what bothers me. I really like the idea of this cause i love Vikings and am really big into all mythology.

Yeaaah, as you said, Mr. Author, you are not really all that good at writing. There is no context to your character, no real history of how he met Lagertha and it bothers me immensely, to be honest. You just threw him there. You have to build these things one by one, like blocks of lego, to make a good story. You did not do that. Instead, you are attempting to go straight to your desired result and it really breaks the immersion.

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