The grammar is bad and makes it hard to make sense of what is going on in what has shown itself to be a... Gay Furry Fluff? Story... Gender pronouns will change every so often as well making it unclear of what is going on. There is nothing to conclude current ages/timeline/chronology from making it even more confusing. The first three chapters are snippets of scenes, interactions with people that dont add any plot to the story to orient onself by, making it feel like your standing in the middle of a room with people speaking poor levels of english with eachother and speaking about Fluff, Furry and Gay Sex in exeedingly poor grammar. I wouldn't recommend this story because of how confusing the contents are... I also am not a fan of the themes it seems to be about but generaly dont give a **** if the grammar and plot is good ... I can't say that for this story... Because i could barely understand some individual sentences and very little of the whole, just to be launched into a furry gay *** scene in chapter two without much substance behind it. I assume the author is trying to just write a gay furry flapping fic in which the the naruto verse is just there to ft gaara and naruto, with plot or romance being a noj factor. If romance or plot were a factor tough, then I think the author should have held off on jumping into *** scenes, and should have spend a lot more time and effort on writing a plot. The *** scene itself, from what I could make out from it didn't have much value either as it was just as poorly written as the rest, its also clear from that scene that the author has not drawn upon past experiences or a decent porno as a reference. All in all. If you can even read half of the fic, then you still won't have anything worth while to read because of poor plot and structuring should you be into the themes mentioned. I recommend to the author to try writing things in his own language and using Google translate to see what sort of sentence structure and grammar the algorithm uses and try to improve their english by way of comparison. Likewise, I recommend the author to use the formatting and story telling structure of their favorite stories or books, and use refence material for specific types of scenes to up the quality.
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