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Darquesse
DarquesseLv64yr
2021-02-27 05:40

No real problems with the story other than the writing quality. The writing quality problem is extremely annoying as it could be solved just by pasting the chapter into word or something. There are 3 common mistakes that the author makes, other than the occasional spelling mistake. 1. Using words like "weren't" and "were" in the wrong situations. Situations that require a "negative" (we didn't do this) sometimes use a "Positive" (we did do this), and vice versa. 2. using the wrong word that sounds the same(there instead of their) or just sounds similar. 3. The most common mistake that the author makes is forgetting to type in a word. This could be any word, from "a" or "us" or "we." This mistake tends to happen (in my experience) due to their typing not keeping up with their thoughts. And not editing.

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Darquesse
DarquesseLv6

Oh, forgot one more mistake the author commonly makes, mixes up past, present and future tenses.

unknown_daoist
unknown_daoistLv14

i think he fixed it over time....bc i dont see any major problems with the grammar in recent chapters...

West
WestLv7

worth reading?

unknown_daoist:i think he fixed it over time....bc i dont see any major problems with the grammar in recent chapters...
Moltenblackbird
MoltenblackbirdLv1

10000%

West:worth reading?
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BonAurevoir
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I just read a couple of the reviews and I understand their complaints. But I do gotta disagree a little in some points for those who are interested in reading. I saw some reviews that said that mc will only follow Canon(though that isn't always bad if done correctly) and while that is true for the beginning, he was mainly doing it to get in touch with all for one. It's his whole mission in the Mha world. So if he were to completely mess up plot he wouldn't have a clue as to when/where he could find All for one. The moment he meets All for one he makes big changes to the plot. Second is that he is a dog for the Yaoyorozu family and a dog for Momo and... no? I mean not really. His mom works for the Yaoyorozu so he lives in one of their houses. And when the Yaoyorozu discover that he has a potentially strong quirk they offer to pay for his tuition. Wouldn't you be the slightest bit thankful for someone who is giving you a house and an education basically free. I don't know how far into the story the review was made but early in the story he acts as somewhat of a bodyguard for Momo but. They go to the same school, live in the same house(or right next to each other),, train together, play together... Wouldn't it make sense to make someone who spends most his time with her to somewhat bodyguard Momo? I mean at that time they are friends and friends lookout for friends. And last thing is about Magnetos powers. He slowly begins to learn how to use more of Magnetos abilities. He isn't planning to lift bridges and lift cities off the ground using his powers like Magneto. But, he isn't magneto, he isn't supposed to be a "bad guy". He will kill no problem but he isn't going to go and kill every non quirk user or something like that. He uses iron sand to fight because that is less destructive than pulling beams out of a building. That's pretty much all. I saw the bad reviews at the top and decided to write this. I understand if you disagree, like every other story this one isn't perfect but in my opinion I think it's good and at least worth a shot. writing quality 5, I usually use the listen feature so I can "read" stories while working/cleaning but from listening to it the grammar seems good(you can really hear bad spelling mistakes ) Story development 5 pretty good so far, latest chapters are the biggest changes from Canon so gotta wait to see what changes that'll bring character design 4 I would say this one is mainly a preference standpoint, though I wouldn't say the character is bad. updating stability 5 so far updates almost daily and more than one chapter. world background 5 it's My hero academia

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