Review Detail of Yans_Tad in Ribbon (Bleach AU)
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I wanted to read this ff so i gave it a chance but man the mc is such a wimp that cries way too much which is not the best thing but its not the end of the world, but his relation with the fmc oc is just too weird and unrealistic and their actions are just too proposterous in the first chapters. the characters interactions in the first chapters are just way too weird and urarhara is out of character, i think the aproach taken by the author to the introduction are a turn off to whatever creative ideas for the following of the story, i really was creeped out by the noseating emotion that exist between a the mc and the first strager that was helping him, it's as if nobody ever helped him which is unrealistic since he is blind, most people are helpful.
Ribbon (Bleach AU)
ImSarius
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Hey man, all good. Not every story is for everyone, and that's just fine. I'm aware of how jarring the initial relationship for Suzumi and Grayson is, and it's something that I'll likely fix in an edited version of the story at some point. I've been told by many that they believe that Urahara is acting out of character, either to angry, cruel, or anything in between, and I have to agree. Mostly because it isn't my intention for him to be the same character as he was back in the show. Also, Yoruichi isn't present. Sending her to scout is only one way that Urahara is capable of collecting information, and the way he did it here was due to a deduction similar to 'keep your friends close, but your enemies closer'. There are reasons for Urahara being the way he is, and they have seemed to satisfy people so far. As for Grayson being a wimp? I don't think so, and I can't see why you'd think so either. Because he cried? Because he shows emotions beyond a stoic, psychopathic guise or just pure anger and teenage angst? Yes, Grayson cries, because suddenly having your entire world ripped from underneath you is scary, and being forced to question yourself and who and what you are is difficult. I can't, in good conscience, be told that Grayson is a wimp, when only yesterday I was told that he was 'too OP'. Maybe it's simply all a matter of perspective. Either way, I hope you return to Ribbon at some point, and if you don't that's fine. There's always another story out there, waiting for you to read it!
Yans_Tad:when i say urahara is out of character i am not talking about his sacastic and witty atitude, i am saying that he would never be careless enough to bring in someone that could be strong into his shop without even sending yoruichi to spy on the person first
I didn't read any chapter yet BUT being OP is a question of power and being a wimp is a matter of personality. They don't conflict.
ImSarius:Hey man, all good. Not every story is for everyone, and that's just fine. I'm aware of how jarring the initial relationship for Suzumi and Grayson is, and it's something that I'll likely fix in an edited version of the story at some point. I've been told by many that they believe that Urahara is acting out of character, either to angry, cruel, or anything in between, and I have to agree. Mostly because it isn't my intention for him to be the same character as he was back in the show. Also, Yoruichi isn't present. Sending her to scout is only one way that Urahara is capable of collecting information, and the way he did it here was due to a deduction similar to 'keep your friends close, but your enemies closer'. There are reasons for Urahara being the way he is, and they have seemed to satisfy people so far. As for Grayson being a wimp? I don't think so, and I can't see why you'd think so either. Because he cried? Because he shows emotions beyond a stoic, psychopathic guise or just pure anger and teenage angst? Yes, Grayson cries, because suddenly having your entire world ripped from underneath you is scary, and being forced to question yourself and who and what you are is difficult. I can't, in good conscience, be told that Grayson is a wimp, when only yesterday I was told that he was 'too OP'. Maybe it's simply all a matter of perspective. Either way, I hope you return to Ribbon at some point, and if you don't that's fine. There's always another story out there, waiting for you to read it!