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David_Neilsen
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2021-04-01 00:42

An interesting beginning to what promises to be an exciting work. The author's Otto is a fully-fledged character with emotions and depth, which is a welcome development. The story has promise and it will be interesting to see how it progresses. My only complaint would be the grammar, as there are confusing uses of words and other errors that take away from the enjoyment of the piece,

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Katzenliebe
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Thank you, I'm afraid I'm not really good at grammar O.o, but I'll try my best to fix the things you've mentioned and watch out for some more. Thank you for telling me where they were though OvO

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The writing is s.u.p.e.r.b and it's really good written story. Little to no grammar mistake and I find the writing here to be at professional standard. Technical writing wise, everything is well described, from characters, emotions, places and especially the way the way the writer described skills and actions is top notch. You could see the effort the writer put on this aspect, as a reader I tend to like great detail in story and he's done great job in describing things especially game-kind of things such as ability, skills and attributes. Everything is detailed making easy for readers to feel the atmosphere. For me personally, as I'm not into another world/Isekai kind of story, I think the story development has been good so far, I think the writer has grasped the correct pace for a fantasy story. Characters are well written and the way the they're introduced and portrayed is pretty great. Otto is a cool and quite level-headed main character. So far aside from Otto, Atter and Elizabeth are the best. Elizabeth is such a strong and really interesting character, she compliments Otto very well, It would be really nice if Otto ends up with her only. The premise itself is quite good I as it has neat synopsis and intriguing first chapter. Though I've to say that cover is a big no, believe me good cover will bring you more readers. If anything, I found some paragraphs are too long/thick and pretty hard to read. And about the restriction of this book. Here could reach webnovel editor through the link below to get it whitelisted. Discord: https://discord.gg/ZBhZYNp Or Editor Discord: Hao#1987 Overall it's good reading experience and well, good luck.

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