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Im a new writer, so theres not much critical analysis i can give, but i really enjoy the style of writing this author has. This is the kind of stuff i came here to read. Everything feels weighty and crafted, like a James Cameron movie, yet the construction is light. Ill probably finish this series first.

An interesting beginning to what promises to be an exciting work. The author's Otto is a fully-fledged character with emotions and depth, which is a welcome development. The story has promise and it will be interesting to see how it progresses. My only complaint would be the grammar, as there are confusing uses of words and other errors that take away from the enjoyment of the piece,

The writing is s.u.p.e.r.b and it's really good written story. Little to no grammar mistake and I find the writing here to be at professional standard. Technical writing wise, everything is well described, from characters, emotions, places and especially the way the way the writer described skills and actions is top notch. You could see the effort the writer put on this aspect, as a reader I tend to like great detail in story and he's done great job in describing things especially game-kind of things such as ability, skills and attributes. Everything is detailed making easy for readers to feel the atmosphere. For me personally, as I'm not into another world/Isekai kind of story, I think the story development has been good so far, I think the writer has grasped the correct pace for a fantasy story. Characters are well written and the way the they're introduced and portrayed is pretty great. Otto is a cool and quite level-headed main character. So far aside from Otto, Atter and Elizabeth are the best. Elizabeth is such a strong and really interesting character, she compliments Otto very well, It would be really nice if Otto ends up with her only. The premise itself is quite good I as it has neat synopsis and intriguing first chapter. Though I've to say that cover is a big no, believe me good cover will bring you more readers. If anything, I found some paragraphs are too long/thick and pretty hard to read. And about the restriction of this book. Here could reach webnovel editor through the link below to get it whitelisted. Discord: https://discord.gg/ZBhZYNp Or Editor Discord: Hao#1987 Overall it's good reading experience and well, good luck.

I have a thing for names. If a person did not even care to name the characters right, I won't even read that novel. this one though, I like all the way. I like the genre, I like the characters, I like the way every thing set up. Well done author. I will keep reading. If you like the game genre, but reality, try it, it's very good. I think I found a keeper for my library.

From reading this, you can tell there was a lot of effort put into this novel. The writing quality is flawless, scenes are described with precision, and every character is unique and all have their own defining qualities. This is a good novel and I recommend it!

I'm not sure how to exactly describe this story. It was an exciting read and made me want to read more and more and befoe I knew it; I was pulled in. Both the world-building and its characters are interestingly made and deserve praise. The writing is very good and there isnt a lot to complain about, all in all, a job well done.

This is such a great read! The world background is well described, and the flow of the story is just right. The first chapter was so heartbreaking as the way you portrayed the emotions of the ML and his circumstances were fascinating. Then the next chapters kept me reading and wanting to know more, though I have to say that I felt a bit confused reading some paragraphs, I have to re-read some of them again to get the complete meaning. Anyway, I loved the interaction with Ater, it is so funny, and the ML personality is really cool, I like he is so level-headed even in that strange situation. Great job, Author!

This one really surprised me. It grabbed me and pulled me in more than any "isekai"-type stoy has in such a long time. The character interactions are just top-notch. All-in-all, the author has done a wonderful job - I see they're also quite young so... They may be - what I'd consider - talented. So, here goes: The Great: How surprised was I to find a story on Webnovel with some competent flow. The descriptions are not only lovingly crafted, but done with an expert eye for detail. It's nice to see. And, best of all? They're trimmed neatly and not at all cumbersome. The characters, also. Wow. The dialogue in particular is pleasant, bringing a smile to my face as I read it. There's a buoyant sense of joy to every scene with Ater and Otto in it. Needs Consideration: Ensure that the video-game world is balanced and follows the rules that you set out. I can see this breaking to the point the power-scaling becomes broken if the MC isn't a) kept in check, and b) doesn't follow the established rules of the world. Needs Immediate Action: Paragraph structure. Lord Sputnik also pointed this out. It can break the flow of reading and force a reader to double-back when paragraph structure is out of whack. Dialogue sometimes takes place halfway through a paragraph and that's really no good. Also, Otto's dialogue comes across... Younger than he's portrayed? Idk. I just had a weird feeling he was older. Oh well. Great work!