I feel like you underestimated how good this really is you put a lot of content in the first couple episodes in overlord and left room for crossovers in a non forced way with the 3rd wishes logic, the only thing i think you would have trouble with is when he trys to split from ainz after the creation of his kingdom i dont see a easy way to write that without it seeming like a forced betrayal or split unless you did somthing like a independent Organization like yukis adventures guild format from that time i got reincarnated as a slime and possibly limiting what you could do in the world of overlord overall it was great

The problem with having an overpowered mc is that it kinda trivializes any conflict, making the story lack tension. Overlord battles this by having Ainz be a cowardly, cautious person stuck in a position where he thinks he needs to be perfect while being influenced by his new undead nature. This, plus the fact that Overlord is told mainly from Ainz's opponents's perspective, keeps the reader invested. The story plays out more like a horror story told from the perspective of the world's inhabitants, while occasionally coming back to the invader who accidentally inspires his pet monsters to conquer the world. In comparison, having Rei as the main character feels really lacking. He's got a plan for everything right from the start, so there is no tension. Most, if not all, of my enjoyment reading your story were his interactions with others. I really liked his dynamic with Momonga/Ainz and the way Solution acts around him. In fact, i think this would be a great story if Rei let Ainz do whatever and just behaved like the troll he is. More interaction, more conversations between him and the Overlord cast would be really interesting. And finally a question: Why does Rei keep his plans and history secret from Ainz? Aren't they friends? What purpose does this serve?

There is too much tedious text and in fact, with the declared harem, all the forces of the character were thrown at one maid girl and the central ones were drained into the sewer. Even the very name of the story is hypocritical considering that your character dropped the Overlord title on the original. As a result, he actually performs the role of an eccentric clown. So whatever you say is really worthy of the title "Yeah, it's trash! "no more.

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my constructive criticism would be to write an actual synopsis and not a paragraph on how much you hate negative comments. only got so much time in a day, not gonna waste it on a mystery novel.

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This is actually probably the best Overlord fic i have red ao far. Atleast the Overlord parts. The only thing i dislike is how you only realy started once they were about tonarrive in Ygrassil. A lot of the Overlord ff i like usually start a couple years pre game release and i usually find the game playing more entertaining than the Ygrassil part.

Ok i'll give my honest opinion. I always love your works and this one was good too but, its the world itself that is making it hard in my opinion. There has never been a completed overlord ff i have read. The world is hard to write i guess. Making a solid 100+ content for it would be very hard.

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