Review Detail of Wataray1 in Summoner of Strawhats
Review detail
This could have been good but you destroyed it all with how you made his character, I can understand he manipulated Vivi with his power unconsciously and even understand that he manipulated Mikita because she's an enemy and he need her loyalty even if the command given to her is simply being a dick but I cannot stand how much of a bastard he was with robin, the girl literally just told him she'll believes in him but he use a command on her and betray her the next second, why ? who knows it wasn't even necessary, it completely destroyed it and dropped there, he's just a fcking manipulative bastard that don't belong in the straw hats crew, it had potential at first but his character ruined it and unless such things are changed this will be sh*t and will stay as such
Summoner of Strawhats
Natsujan
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Okay I guess? Can't really satisfy everyone. And we all know Robin doesn't trust anyone easily at the start, she only uses people to stay safe. Only at a later point when the Straw hats grew on her did she try to sacrifice herself, even to their objection. I made the mc do this so Robin would be more reluctant of leaving. He is maybe manipulative, but no person is pure in the face of their convictions and desires.
When he makes someone a summon he can give them a command, kinda like sugar when she turns people into toys. Spoiler: He silebtly muttered the command that she will fall in love with him, the more she is near him. But we all know that Robin is logical, so she will think first, consider and then act.
DragonkingKyo:can you tell me what did he do in detail
I get why they are mad as it is a short cut instead of him working for her love and can be seen as a betrayal but the command sounded more like it would effect her emotions then then way she thinks and we all know that no matter how logical someone is they are still effected by emotions even if only a little for people that are extremely logical(meaning they feel little emotions) which Robin isn't logical to that level she to me is more calculative then logical to me(emotion aren't always logical)
Natsujan:When he makes someone a summon he can give them a command, kinda like sugar when she turns people into toys. Spoiler: He silebtly muttered the command that she will fall in love with him, the more she is near him. But we all know that Robin is logical, so she will think first, consider and then act.
You act as if she's a robot lol. And the command he gave her is exponential or infinite type at least from a logical standpoint too. The second she feels closer she loves him hence feels closer and loves him more...
Natsujan:When he makes someone a summon he can give them a command, kinda like sugar when she turns people into toys. Spoiler: He silebtly muttered the command that she will fall in love with him, the more she is near him. But we all know that Robin is logical, so she will think first, consider and then act.
There was also no point to do that since she has strawhats and he could've made a concentrated effort to get closer to her and try to change her thoughts and influence her without powers lol just like strawhats originally did, they went above and beyond for her
Natsujan:Okay I guess? Can't really satisfy everyone. And we all know Robin doesn't trust anyone easily at the start, she only uses people to stay safe. Only at a later point when the Straw hats grew on her did she try to sacrifice herself, even to their objection. I made the mc do this so Robin would be more reluctant of leaving. He is maybe manipulative, but no person is pure in the face of their convictions and desires.
Lol your justification is plain dumb and sh*t nobody grow to trust someone directly it must be earned and you broke it the moment she started moreover you did so that she won't leave then why the word 'like' and him and not the crew? no your character just is sht and there was no need for him to do so immediately since in the end she would have trusted them along the way but no you had to go and destroy it all, anyway your story and character is sh*t
Natsujan:Okay I guess? Can't really satisfy everyone. And we all know Robin doesn't trust anyone easily at the start, she only uses people to stay safe. Only at a later point when the Straw hats grew on her did she try to sacrifice herself, even to their objection. I made the mc do this so Robin would be more reluctant of leaving. He is maybe manipulative, but no person is pure in the face of their convictions and desires.
You destroyed your story and character with one paragraph don't try to explain what you did with 'trust' it's hypocritical and your mc didn't do it for loyalty
Natsujan:When he makes someone a summon he can give them a command, kinda like sugar when she turns people into toys. Spoiler: He silebtly muttered the command that she will fall in love with him, the more she is near him. But we all know that Robin is logical, so she will think first, consider and then act.
What you say doesn't even make sense, it would have happened either way you just don't know how to write a proper character story if your reason really is what you said because it doesn't appear as such
Natsujan:Okay I guess? Can't really satisfy everyone. And we all know Robin doesn't trust anyone easily at the start, she only uses people to stay safe. Only at a later point when the Straw hats grew on her did she try to sacrifice herself, even to their objection. I made the mc do this so Robin would be more reluctant of leaving. He is maybe manipulative, but no person is pure in the face of their convictions and desires.
I think he's just trying to find an excuse when there aren't any because he just fcked up pretty badly
Inferno_Vor:There was also no point to do that since she has strawhats and he could've made a concentrated effort to get closer to her and try to change her thoughts and influence her without powers lol just like strawhats originally did, they went above and beyond for her
They explained in other comment but overall he tell someone that he can be trusted and seconds later he betray their trust and 'manipulate' if you can call that by giving a command, I simplified it a lot but it irritated me too much
DragonkingKyo:can you tell me what did he do in detail
Another thing, as you said she doesn't trust people easily so if we follow your reason she wouldn't have trusted his power because she knows how people are and that they tend to lie and knowing about df and their potential she wouldn't trusted him enough to let him use his power so you contradict yourself
Natsujan:Okay I guess? Can't really satisfy everyone. And we all know Robin doesn't trust anyone easily at the start, she only uses people to stay safe. Only at a later point when the Straw hats grew on her did she try to sacrifice herself, even to their objection. I made the mc do this so Robin would be more reluctant of leaving. He is maybe manipulative, but no person is pure in the face of their convictions and desires.
Wataray1:Another thing, as you said she doesn't trust people easily so if we follow your reason she wouldn't have trusted his power because she knows how people are and that they tend to lie and knowing about df and their potential she wouldn't trusted him enough to let him use his power so you contradict yourself
There's no arguing actually, I stated facts and you just happen to have no arguments and I already dropped this, I just did a review in order to warn others
Natsujan:Okay you win, I don't feel like arguing anymore. Have fun browsing through other fanfics ^^
