Review Detail of Jasonenrick in Wizard Diaries : New Blood

Writing Quality 3-Stars Story Development 2-Stars Character Design 2-Stars Updating Stability 2-Stars World Background 1-Star Writing Quality[WQ]: I'm going to be Straightforward. It's average and not that good. Not bad, really; But sadly not great either! It has a few grammar mistakes and while I am not that good in English, considering that English isn't my mother language, it isn't that awful either; I hope so at least! Story Development[SD]: It is mostly written in an 'extroperspecive', which means seeking external or societal evidence of information! It is rather trite and clumsy and chapter 1 was honestly useless and could be deleted. It describes that the Mc was killed, got a few wishes, and sent into the crossover world of TVD& HP. But not only did the Mc make an additional Wish which makes it 6 out of 5 but he also lost his memory. And this my friend is the thing that got on me the most, not because he lost his memory but I questioned myself why the author wrote this. He could've just made an Oc that lives in the crossover world of TVD& HP, is powerful, a descent of one of the 4 founders, and a Metamorphmagi! Why make all this Omnipotent powerful ROB shit when you make him forget his memory.....I don't get it. Why make an SI when you make him lose his memory, just make him an OC then. Lastly, it is very plot-driven, and not in a good way! You can see that at the end of Chapter 2. The cost of the wand is also bullshit etc. Also, he only has 1 founder connection, not all but...whatever! What is also stupid is that the author completely messed up timelines and randomly made up things such as altering Susan's age etc. I have a lot more to say, especially his mission....but I want to go to bed! On we go, enough rant about the Story Development. Character Design[CD]: How to makes this short because it is late in the night and I want to go to bed; He is a kid, so that means he is naive, innocent, stupid, etc etc. Not much to say or except that Updating Stability[US]: Well, see for yourself. World Background[WB]: A complete mess up with timelines and background, not much to say here either, mainly because I am tired. An: It is late and I am tired so please excuse grammar mistakes and wrong wording. Also, I edited a lot in Story Development because I found a lot and had to rewrite my sentences.....but as I said, I want to go to bed so I gave a f_uck about grammatically good sentences and just wrote. English isn't my mother language blablablabla.