The quality of writing isn't defined by the words, but by the ability to explain an event in a comprehensive way. In this regard, the author uses a simple speech that is convenient and consistent with the personality of Hailee Tatum, our MC. The development of the story sins in many parts and tends to weigh on slow-burn; I read until chapter 46 and stopped because I don't believe that the required expenditure will compensate in any way. There are many gaps in development that make reading difficult. An example is when Hailee is chased by the bodyguards of the city R' attorney and she simply pretends to meet Ramon (our ML) who has just been in an accident. There are basic things that can be deduced and the author doesn't infer this at all, like where was she when the accident happened? What was her physical state? How did she get there?The author literally made her come to the scene of the accident and say that she was Ramon's fianceé, and that was simply accepted! So, let's take into account some basic traits that would raise the mistrust of the family and employees; from the description of the story, Hailee is much younger, immature and inexperienced than Ramon. What are her skills to be his bride? Nowhere does Hailee have any ability to be the future Madame Tordoff. The fact that Lis Tordoff (ML's mother) was previously involved in her son's relationship doesn't justify the lack of logical thinking of a businesswoman who lost her husband and managed the great empire for years before her son took over!!! The only reasonable character design here is that of Ramon Tordoff, and I believe the author did it unconsciously, following the CEO stereotypes that we usually see. Hailee is incompetent, naive and extremely unable to adapt well to a situation. For someone who has lost her parents, 'possibly' murdered a person and lost everything she has, she seems quite reckless and irresponsible! I find her excuse of heavy conscience and moral distorted quite weak if taken into account. Another detail is the background of the story. It seems that the author made no effort to create or develop the environment where the story takes place. Naming cities with random letters with details that add no value. The misunderstandings elaborated for the sake of history are so ridiculous, if they were handled in another way as in a more rational and logical perspective, we (readers) could engage with a more romantic development of the couple or at least of friend-to-lovers. It isn't a totally bad experience, however, it would be a waste of time, passes / coins. I'm available to discuss the matter with anyone who comments here.
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I think about brides for arrange marriages they arent doing so for the bride to be capable to help the groom but more so like a trophy (usually how it works that way) But also making cities with letters is a common trait and I believe it so they can create their own cities (in many stories youll see used as Country J, City F, Town G, etc) or countries w out accidentally conflicting w real life places although most authors would just place a warning that it has nothing to do with real life some take this route to avoid conflicts so yea if you read WNs more just know that this is prob the reason for letter name places
