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2021-06-09 14:46

Hi! This is kera, an editor of the international writing contest SWA II. I believe your book has great potential, so I invited you to join in a week ago. Please reply to me so I can discuss this with you in detail.

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Usagi_mofu
Usagi_mofuLv11

Yeah, I mean...... Yes? No? This novel is really a fifty fifty. Kingdom building novel where the mc has the ability to teleport to one world to the other. Like the sypnosis said the mc will be given the city without having to pay tribute. So that means he is independant basically. So MC uses modern items to trade for money and uses that to build his own city for now. In the 40 chapters he already fought several wars, albeit lackluster explained it really shows mc's retardness. I mean, how the f*ck? This guy really thinks that if he equiped (only about 1 month?) trained soldiers with advanced weapons like crossbows and better quality swords and catapults he can defeat someone's seasoned soldiers with number advantage? Oh guess what? Of course he won! Like he got confidence defeating unorgansized bandits he think he can win against well trained armies? Just because he has better equipment? What, even his soldiers can adapt into modern formations? (In one month and even less). And there's no explanation how he even got his weapons from the modern world, no interaction with the modern world at all! Oh, forgot to say he's a huge f*cking hypocrite, or you could say the author is one cuz in this world there exist demi-humans. So mc accepts refugees and there are demi-humans mixed in with them. Well, he says he will give them equal rights but no, the demi-humans apparantly got less than normal humans. Wow, you change your damn mind faster than I beat my meat! Translation - 5* (Smooth like the hands in my freezer~) SoU - 5* (trial reads, always 5 stars) Story development - 3* (I don;t know how to explain this, read it yourself) Character design - 1* (Overconfident mc with retarded thinking) World background - 3* (demi-humans and medieval technology/era) Overall score 3.4

Cewu
CewuLv14

I had hoped for more, I like city/kingdom building novels in general and it is my favorite genre to read. I have read the first 10 chapters, it is kind of... bland... it just doesnt catch my attention. I might force myself to read the free chapters, and I rly hope it gets better. My biggest disappointment is the fact that his trip to the real world was not described. He just goes and comes back with a bunch of stuff... no talk about how he acquired them or anything. I mean let's be real... how will you get shotguns in China? it's not like he whipped them out of his arse. Same with swords and bows & arrows. No talk about how he acquired anything really... I would have really liked to see his trip as he meets the people that he does and sells them some stuff. (trip as in before he cured the kid and got scammed) When he came to the city. He didn't personally do much... or it was not described. He would just hand the papers to someone else to handle... I get that it is realistic since I would delegate work like that too if I was in the same situation... but at least tell us the path of him researching how to make a proper water wheel or something. Like a paragraph or two was enough. The chapters are short and there are some inconsistencies when it comes to either translation or maybe the author just doesnt know what he is writing. I will probably read the free chapters and update my review based on that... but for now I have read 25% of what I can read and I'm not impressed. Especially if I have to pay or use free-passes to read the rest.

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