Review Detail of Chaoscaller in Ember's Crown

This is a really nice start with an intriguing world, clear goal in mind and a (for the moment) small cast which is easy to maintain and keep track of. However, if I may add a pinch of critique... It seems you confuse quotation marks (") with single 'floating comma's' ('). Quotation marks are used to signal dialogue, the other kind is mostly used to talk about the name of something. ( Example: "May I prsent to you my new work?" The man waved towards a brown leather-bound booklet. "I call it 'The guide to the world'.") Another thing. A tiny thing, really, but... Don't use verbs that convey speech after a spoken sentence. (Like "That was insane!" He yelled.) Your readers will understand that someone is screaming their lungs to shreds if need be. My tip is to use that small sentence after a spoken part to add a bit of description about the person speaking or the person who is spoken to. Show, don't tell, remember? Aside form those two minor things, you are doing a great job! Please keep it up!