Review Detail of Everythinger_Kumar in Black Market Merchant

For starters, I really liked your description and some of the words you’ve used there. The metaphors are really apt for where you’ve used them and it provides a great, detailed image of your imagination. One thing that most isekai or unrealistic plots face is that most people do not stick through till the end until they are rewarded with a good story lead / hook not to before nor too early into the story. I think you have found your sweet spot there. The dialogues of the characters are very well delivered with appropriate descriptions and actions. You haven’t given us too much nor too less and that is one great thing in your story. The action scene is depicted in a great way and is very descriptive while maintaining that sweet spot of yours. One thing I would advice is to not name the chapters as chapter # because that would appear repeated and wouldn’t look appealing to the eyes. Only thing you have to do is probably take the chapter # out and just keep the name of the chapter like for example (Chapter 1: Arrival). Otherwise, it’s a great story that you have written.