Up till now it is great. I love it. I hope it will continue to be great in the future. Character development is good. At first few chapter are short but as chapter increases its length also increases great.

You really really need a good translator or an editor Your grammar sucks tbh but the idea of your story is great and I guess its good if this is your first fic . Don't be in a hurry to post your chapters . Take time but at least post it with as less mistakes as possible .

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My man yogi...you got a great imagination and story writing skills.....really good one....we must create a chess manga.i am looking forward to that

The beginning of fanfiction interesting😊! But I would like more descriptions and dialogues... I hope this improves over time🙃. There are few chapters, so it is still difficult to judge the main character🌸.

The grammar and spelling have a few mistakes but overall still 👌👌 [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

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The idea is interesting, but there is not much development in the plot, it moves very fast and without obstacles, there are no ups and downs in the story to bring emotion, it is basically a straight line without much emotion in the story, for me this fan-fic is more like a '' wish fulfillment '' than a fan-fic focused on a new story inside naruto with the addition of his sister, but anyway, it's not a bad idea, just written in an amateur way, it doesn't mean that is bad.

Really good read with some minor language problems........ .. ................. .. ..... ......................................................