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Tangerqueen
TangerqueenLv24yr
2020-11-18 05:13

Pretty short story so far so not much to comment on. Writing Quality (4.5/5 --> Rounds up to 5/5): There are slight grammatical mistakes, but there is nothing that impedes with my understanding of the storyline. Stability of Updates (5/5): Not much to say. Story Development (4/5): I would honestly say that the beginning was a bit too repetitive in terms of how he wished he could have done differently or didn't live as boring of a life. I would have preferred to jump in the action so that it would have hooked me a bittt more, but this is mostly personal preference. Character Design (5/5): Lots of details sprinkled throughout. World Background (5): Many descriptions that help set the tone. Overall, good job!

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