okay look story is decent but I have a large problem. the way it's written is really disorienting. take the synopsis the king says " all the other brothers but the youngest brother." rather than " all but the youngest brother" see how the second sentence flows better. also us he or they sometimes. when the kind is being addressed and speaks you don't need to say the king just say he. I am not trying to be a hater I genuinely want this book to succeed and I'm trying to provide constructive criticism.
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LIKEHello there! Thank you for commenting and reading our story. We really appreciate that you leave a reminder for us. As an editor, I will take your advice and will try to be better. But as you can imagine the translating process is very hard for me. Language is a problem, but I also hardly find time for it and when I'm close to finishing it, I became exhausted. So I usually make mistakes. But still thank you for the advice. I hope you have fun with our story and have a peaceful day reading!