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2020-12-28 19:32

I love the story line. It is very intriguing and obviously fascinating. You have a good flow to the story and the character development is quite well done. I haven't read the whole thing, but as I will go along, I'll add my feedback on the comments. Overall, the story is great! One small suggestion for the chapters I've read so far is that you should expand more on the protagonist's emotions. I just think it helps the readers develop a better connection with the protagonist.

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