Review Detail of MakiTeto in I Reincarnated as I have got One Permanent Ability per Day
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-The writing needs improvement -The grammar is fine -Too fast paced -The mc accepts too fast of his current situation,making him have a personality of an emotionless person Tips: Change your style of writing Something like this Girl: Boy: If you don't like that way of writing do it like this The boy spoke to the girl "Words Words Words"(Boy) "Words Words Words"(Girl) The reason for the parenthesis Is to indicate who is speaking but after those first two sentences you can remove the parenthesis something like this Words Words Words"(Boy) "Words Words Words"(Girl) "Words Words Words" "Words Words Words" By improving the parts i mentioned Your story will improve atleast a bit And lastly put your heart into making the novel!
I Reincarnated as I have got One Permanent Ability per Day
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Adapting quickly to a situation does not make you an emotionless person, as I say, I adapt quickly to emotional change (death of my grandfather and sister), however that does not leave me emotionless because, I cried, I was in depression, etc. But I got over it really fast. That is why a change that does you good in some way and does not harm your loved one, is not only welcome, but you accept or adapt quickly. We may not know it, but things that happen to our family hurt us more than to ourselves.
but still you need to have time to adapt like yours you cried before you adapted but in this novel he just discarded his past life immediately despite being in a new body or somethin
JosePascua:Adapting quickly to a situation does not make you an emotionless person, as I say, I adapt quickly to emotional change (death of my grandfather and sister), however that does not leave me emotionless because, I cried, I was in depression, etc. But I got over it really fast. That is why a change that does you good in some way and does not harm your loved one, is not only welcome, but you accept or adapt quickly. We may not know it, but things that happen to our family hurt us more than to ourselves.image
I can't say much as we don't know about the MC's past life. Either he was a loner and that's why he accepted the change, or because he knows that he can do nothing but accept it then he adjusted to his new life, and we add the fact that he has the memories of 'Harumi Takeda', who is already familiar with the environment, world and he, then is another point. Or he can combine all of the above and that made it accept that easy.
MakiTeto:but still you need to have time to adapt like yours you cried before you adapted but in this novel he just discarded his past life immediately despite being in a new body or somethin
JosePascua:I can't say much as we don't know about the MC's past life. Either he was a loner and that's why he accepted the change, or because he knows that he can do nothing but accept it then he adjusted to his new life, and we add the fact that he has the memories of 'Harumi Takeda', who is already familiar with the environment, world and he, then is another point. Or he can combine all of the above and that made it accept that easy.
JosePascua:I can't say much as we don't know about the MC's past life. Either he was a loner and that's why he accepted the change, or because he knows that he can do nothing but accept it then he adjusted to his new life, and we add the fact that he has the memories of 'Harumi Takeda', who is already familiar with the environment, world and he, then is another point. Or he can combine all of the above and that made it accept that easy.
MakiTeto:Isn't it too emotionless he didn't even feel sadness when he departed with his family
MakiTeto:Isn't it too emotionless he didn't even feel sadness when he departed with his family
It depends on the point of view of the person. For example, he can have a very good relationship with him family or a very bad one, depending on this is whether him accept it quickly or not.
ExaltedCrow:Not really.