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2023-01-11 17:30

It's a good story. I thought it was abandoned.

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Enigmation
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Reviewed as of chp 15ish: TLDR; Needs a lot of work to even be mediocre. Went into it with low expectations, still dissatisfied. Though this story is basically author freeballing it so not expecting much improvement, perhaps in his future works he might. WQ(2/5) - Not good. At least it's somewhat readable but the lack of proper grammar, usage of commas and misspellings do not help the technical side. The writing itself is pretty flat, more of a summary or description rather than actual storytelling. SD(2/5) - Basically follows cannon events in the prequel with MC just following along till he gets bored. His wishes basically made him the strongest being in existence thus there's no real suspense, worse yet is the fact there isn't any meaningful build up. I feel like there wasn't any plan or storyboard going into the creation process of this story, making it just seem very janky and jaring. CD(2/5) - Legitimately the dialogue just kills this for me. There isn't any monologue or exposition from the MC. We basically don't have a narrator(not even an unreliable one)just an event explainer. Due to this, we don't really understand who the characters truly are. And God help anyone trying to understand the MC's motivation and whatnot. US(2/5) - Inconsistent and after a year only 30+ chps. Make of that what you will. WB(2/5) - The world could have been expanded and explored. Possibly adding a mystical aspect to the plague that granted Alexander his immortality. Unfortunately, we don't get much in terms of world building.

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