Review Detail of yokedjaguar in Instant Mastery In Harry Potter (English)

Frankly it's just hard to read. Even if your an ******* some of the mistakes shouldn't have been made especially if you've read other stories. In example your overzealous need for the readers to know your mc is the most handsome man to grace the earth. You also need to learn how to write in general. Hope you'll strive to better your work but at the moment I don't think your up for it. Good luck.