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MissMacabre
MissMacabreLv134yr
2021-04-27 08:49

This story has so much potential, but it’s lost in errors. First, the chapters are not in order, and most chapters are repeated. There are no transitions between paragraphs. It’s very easy to get confused while reading due to the mixed up chapters and non transitional paragraphs. There are a few grammatical and mechanical missteps, those are few, and easy to overlook. The biggest issue is how the author mixes up characters names. There is a character named Amy and a character named Aurora, in one chapter, the author used their names interchangeably. The main MLI is named Aurelius, and around chapter 40, his name suddenly becomes Kieran. The ending of the story drops off. It feels like the author was tired of writing and stopped, called it the end. Like I said, this story has great potential. The plot is good and interesting. It needs reworking. Perhaps, the author can do some editing to fix these things, and re-post it on Webnovel, or another writing/reading platform.

His Rogue Luna

Goddess-Of-Dawn
3.1
70 Chs

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Palm_BeachF1
Palm_BeachF1Lv12

I have to repeat other people's reviews...I really enjoyed this book until the chapters started duplicating and went out of order...tried to persevere but gave up...such a bummer as it's a great start to the book! hopefully the author will clean it up as I would love to read the rest!

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Sara_Elizabeth_3265
Sara_Elizabeth_3265Lv11

This story has been by far the most annoying story i have read. Multiple upon multiple chapters are continuously repeated, so much so that it was such a waste of any point spent on it. The story was great but didnt actually have an end to it It has 72 chapters but in reality due to the repeated chapters, it was more like 40 chapters that you charged me for 72. Annoyed beyond belief

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Angel_Moon_1111
Angel_Moon_1111Lv15

I just started this book and am hooked!! I like a book that slowly and methodically causes you to fall hopelessly in love with the mains, so much do that you’re sharing their pain with your own tears and their triumphs with your own pride! So far a great book!

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NovaLuna
NovaLunaLv13

Up until chapter 17, the book is fine. But as soon as you hit chapter 17, you suddenly run into duplicate chapters that you already read. Plot holes of missing information that isn't explained. Either whole chapters are completely missing, or chapters are posted out of order. The author needs to fix these errors, then maybe I'll return to finish reading the story. It's too bad, because the story was actually pretty good until all the chapter upload errors started appearing. Fix the chapters inside the book, and I will update my Review.

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EjHip
EjHipLv15

I have lost track of story the chapters are all mixed up and repeat over and again and now the characters are different i dont know what happened.

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Vanessa_Munns
Vanessa_MunnsLv13

Fairly annoyed as chapTers were repeated a number of times in the 70, jumbled chaPters with plot all over the place. it had a chance to be awesoMe , but the editing of chaPters Let it down badly

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Lau_riz
Lau_rizLv14

It Is very frustrating to read. Many chapters are repeated in different order tgere is no time line since the chapters are al over the place and repeated more than twic…. is SAD considering is a nice plot

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Becky_Wilson_0780
Becky_Wilson_0780Lv15

This story is riveting until you get to about chapter 20. Then chapters start repeating and chapters are obviously skipped. I am done reading this story unless the author takes responsibility and fixes the chapters.

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LaWalker00
LaWalker00Lv11

The story is fantastic! However at Chapter 16 they start skipping crucial scenarios and are repeats... I'm going to finish the book because I spent all my coins pre-unlocking them all but it's nonetheless frustrating.

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