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2020-11-22 10:30

Okay, I'm hooked with the synopsis. I can get that you've already have a great world background. It's a potential great shounen storyline, with lots of adventures. My only suggestions is about the description part, I find it difficult to understand, that some parts may be a bit confusing. I'll suggest the author to have some re-read or proofreading to make improvements. P.S. I would keep on reading, if I find something, I'll comment so you'll make improvements. Keep it up!!!

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@instagram Nathanisontheway4 I gave Focus a 5/5 in everything but writing quality. It isn't that I make any major errors, but it seems like I can never re-read through a chapter I've uploaded without wanting to pull my hair out because I made a typo here, or spelt something wrong there. But! if you can forgive an author for constantly spelling dao, doa, I'm sure Focus will be something you enjoy for a long time to come! Aside from my mistakes, Focus has a lot of strengths. I believe the world and lore are all very interesting. There are countless clans and sects, and each has a unique history with each other that pushes the story forward. In terms of character development, Chen rui straight forward as you can get, but it's clear he himself . I also try to give every important character a unique backstory of note that explains their motivations and personality. For stability of uploads, that's something you never have to worry about :) I've been uploading at least 2 chapters a day for the better part of a month now, and the only times I uploaded a single chapter was back when I didn't split my 4000 word chapters in multiple parts. You'll have something to come back to enjoy everyday :) As for the story itself, the second volume will speak for itself. The first was an introductory arc, where we introduce the mc, who he is, his back story, and his first female companion. The second, however, truly delves into the lore of the Focus verse. We have mystery, backstabbing, and plenty of face slapping. I hope you'll all enjoy Focus as much as I enjoy writing it everyday! :)

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