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Jo_J
Jo_JLv134yr
2020-11-20 03:10

You've successfully created a different reality, btw interesting one! The plot is captivating and characters are expressive, also descriptions of the backgroud are good, detailed. It looks from the beginnning that you already have a concept for the story as ALL!

THE DIFFICULTEST SYSTEM EVER

CoolForniteplayer
4.9
7 Chs

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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

Thx for the advice really matters im a continues making chapters and you can read them as well.

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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

You're welcome! Please correct the synopsis... the writes say that "a good synopsis and prologue are most important - a part of the success..."

CoolForniteplayer:Thx for the advice really matters im a continues making chapters and you can read them as well.
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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

I will try. But please correct a few at the beginning! I explained why somewhere already... ;)

CoolForniteplayer:Thx for the advice really matters im a continues making chapters and you can read them as well.
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

ok

Jo_J:You're welcome! Please correct the synopsis... the writes say that "a good synopsis and prologue are most important - a part of the success..."
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

ok

Jo_J:I will try. But please correct a few at the beginning! I explained why somewhere already... ;)
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

I just now change synopsis

Jo_J:I will try. But please correct a few at the beginning! I explained why somewhere already... ;)
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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

5-6 sentences, but do not "sell" everything, leave some mystery ;)

CoolForniteplayer:I just now change synopsis
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

Ok

Jo_J:5-6 sentences, but do not "sell" everything, leave some mystery ;)
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

Do you know anyone good at art?

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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

What d you mean by "art"? it's very general term ;) Sorry for my errors... my phone lives its own life :) corrects itself (that's the beauty of using a few languages )

CoolForniteplayer:Do you know anyone good at art?
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

I mean anyone that can make me an image for my book cover?

Jo_J:What d you mean by "art"? it's very general term ;) Sorry for my errors... my phone lives its own life :) corrects itself (that's the beauty of using a few languages )
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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

you can use the inkstone, I can explain how to do that on discord

CoolForniteplayer:I mean anyone that can make me an image for my book cover?
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

I mean anyone that can make me an image for my book cover?

Jo_J:you can use the inkstone, I can explain how to do that on discord
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

Yea but inkstone got lame pictures not be rude.

Jo_J:you can use the inkstone, I can explain how to do that on discord
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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

Don't complain ;) If you try you can find something orginal ;)

CoolForniteplayer:Yea but inkstone got lame pictures not be rude.
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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

ok

Jo_J:Don't complain ;) If you try you can find something orginal ;)
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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

great synopis! the first sentence tooo looong... Who/what is otaku?

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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

Hey sup

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CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

This novel has to be redo im sorry it has been given very bad review such as a lot of grammatical reviews so i have to redo it sorry!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

4yr

jenos_showerheads
jenos_showerheadsLv5

i read the first couple of chapters and i'm honestly really hooked on the world building. the way you listed all the specs like stamina, health, etc. was v cool because you don't see that often in novels and that tibit made it feel like an actual game

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Scollins_Singh
Scollins_SinghLv1

Keep up challenging your talent everyone and happy halloween stay safe wear a mask everyway you go it winter and the statics of covid 19 are going up all over the globe so stay safe and wish god all the best and make this treat go away and support this author thank you.

4yr
CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

FINALLY 100 CHAPTERS GOOD LUCK READING THAT WAS THE LAST BUT NEXT VOLUME I WILL CONTINUE WRITING MORE CHAPTERS GOOD LUCK READING GUYS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

4yr
CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

@instagram Nathanisontheway4 I gave Focus a 5/5 in everything but writing quality. It isn't that I make any major errors, but it seems like I can never re-read through a chapter I've uploaded without wanting to pull my hair out because I made a typo here, or spelt something wrong there. But! if you can forgive an author for constantly spelling dao, doa, I'm sure Focus will be something you enjoy for a long time to come! Aside from my mistakes, Focus has a lot of strengths. I believe the world and lore are all very interesting. There are countless clans and sects, and each has a unique history with each other that pushes the story forward. In terms of character development, Chen rui straight forward as you can get, but it's clear he himself . I also try to give every important character a unique backstory of note that explains their motivations and personality. For stability of uploads, that's something you never have to worry about :) I've been uploading at least 2 chapters a day for the better part of a month now, and the only times I uploaded a single chapter was back when I didn't split my 4000 word chapters in multiple parts. You'll have something to come back to enjoy everyday :) As for the story itself, the second volume will speak for itself. The first was an introductory arc, where we introduce the mc, who he is, his back story, and his first female companion. The second, however, truly delves into the lore of the Focus verse. We have mystery, backstabbing, and plenty of face slapping. I hope you'll all enjoy Focus as much as I enjoy writing it everyday! :)

4yr
CoolForniteplayer
CoolForniteplayerAuthor

Hey, Author here. I’m really happy to see such good comments about my book, and I hope it continues into the future as well. But that’s not what I wrote this review for... If someone rates the book at 3-4 stars, I sincerely believe that there was an issue with the book. After all, I can’t notice everything wrong, so I will check to see if there can be any improvements. Additionally, I hope that people who give 3-4 stars will specify what problems they see. Also, I would love to have those people to come back and read the altered novel again before finally deciding how they feel. Last of all though, to all readers and writers alike, thank you for taking the time to read it. Have fun !

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Faysal_Ahmed_5058
Faysal_Ahmed_5058Lv2

I am a new reader of this npvelso I saw the synopsis and read some reviews here. Then i gave it a try. Its really good with the world building and character formation. A lot of words in a chapter too. I enjoyed it very much. But I want more action and drama here

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Anotoki
AnotokiLv12

It was enjoyable even though there are some grammatical issues here and there but it was no biggie. [img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp][img=exp]

4yr
Hanna_Chow
Hanna_ChowLv2

wOW MORE CHapters are out yes i was waiting for this whole week and finally 80 chapters on the dot i can't believe my eyes insane This author only created this book couple weeks ago and look at it now views chapters wow incredibly insane that i can't believe excellent job author i have to say that you are incredible that you made these chapters so fast you are like a super fast typing machine good luck continuing at your success.

4yr
Hanna_Chow
Hanna_ChowLv2

Great book, great writing and superb character development. The journey we experience along with the MC from the baby arc in the beginning through the academy arc. The book stays consistent with writing and develops the world beautifully. We experience the MC gradually develop into what is considered a healthy and fulfilled person while also searching for meaning to his existence. 5 stars all day long

4yr
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