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2021-06-30 17:11

The first chapter lays out an interesting character. And the pacing is alright. I think the author could write her characters' description into the story instead of outright telling the reader. I like the foreshadow of the drama that'll rise up later in the second chapter when they're deciding schools. All in all, a great story that I can see going far. Please keep up the writing.

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