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Ultimatedaywriter
UltimatedaywriterLv44yr
2020-11-04 00:00

I can really see a good story in the making. Horror comedy isn't my genre but some parts got a chuckle out of me and that's more than most comedy nowadays. It may need a little more editing on the dialogue but that doesn't take away from the story.

MY PRECIOUS.

Darlene_Virginia
4.8
173 Chs

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BaeVida
BaeVidaLv14

Wow, it is a nice book. Narration and description are on point. It has its own sad fate that brings out the locked emotions in someone... Little errors but can be overlooked as we all are not perfect. It doesn't change the flow of the story and the pace... Author did a good job. Nice one

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Jo_J
Jo_JLv13

Nice! Interesting story! I like the action, I like the drama. So many names at the beginning... but that's fine. Please just not use the word "CEO" in your novel. So many people already have "allergy" for that :))) Besides you are doing exellent job! Keep writing! Good luck with it!

4yr
Butterscotch_07
Butterscotch_07Lv2

Intriguing plot. Two babies separated since birth, having different attitudes... Till what I've read, I found the story really interesting. There are a few grammar mistakes but I think you can work on those as they are not obvious while reading. Good luck [img=recommend]

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Joanna_Kuteesa
Joanna_KuteesaLv1

I loved the book. There were some errors but you still brought of the story, I can't wait for the other parts [img=update][img=update][img=recommend]

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bibiyenini
bibiyeniniLv3

Reveal spoiler

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CtrlAltKnight
CtrlAltKnightLv4

A solid and startling narration plus a great plot! New hidden gem get! Please keep it up, dear author. Hmnn. How can I help more... Oh, I suggest you make a better cover through Canva or any free app. I feel like your cover isn't doing your writing justice. Please keep up! May the author write more, edit more, enjoy more, and even earn more^^.

4yr
AxlesOfFate
AxlesOfFateLv1

From what I read I was quite interested and quickly. The feeling of disappointment of the baby that survived and was not taken was heart-wrenching but set the mood for the entire story perfectly.

4yr
Yard_Min
Yard_MinLv4

The start is really promising and points to a great story every way, flow of thought is very good, several pages along the story the characters and story gain momentum, keeping that pace and story line is very difficult and you wouldn’t realize it unless you were to write a story. Waiting for the horror part now.

4yr
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rain_berry_
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Nice stuff.!! I love the way author takes the theme. apt title and i wanna appreciate writer's ability to Express and communicate the idea through written words.

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