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2021-01-04 08:27

lolol the title alone already makes me laugh the synopsis is top notch and I read first chapter, hooked. the author has a unique writing style. keep it up, boss!

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Well it's time to be a downer again. In all honesty it's an interesting story. I will not pretend that it wasn't the title of the book that got me here, though it isn't why I read on. For better or wore the story is engaging, and attempts to use elements from our reality in this fictional setting. That said I have three problems with the book right now. First off I'm not even sure I'm reading English or another language that's been put through an online translator. I Don't mean to be offensive but my brain hurts from trying to read the text in this work. A lot of the first sixty chapters had paragraphs that came across as complete nonsense or more accurately put were incomprehensible. Then, when I could understand what was being said, I would be led to question the logic of the characters. Not in a good way though. Second, nothing is explained in this book. This may be a language barrier thing again, but a lot of the concepts mentioned just weren't communicated well enough for me to understand. Thus, for me the world development is quite poor. Third, drawing back to a previous point, The logic and actions of the characters is exaggerated? I'm not quite sure if that's how I would actually describe it but they do many unreasonable things. While this may be intentional I personally just didn't enjoy it. Personal feelings aside, It didn't seem fitting to try to incorporate so many logical and illogical concepts together in the same story and sometimes paragraph. But this may again be a language barrier thing, and I'm entirely wrong about this point. Either way the story has potential, but that's about it. It has "potential". I just don't think the book was ready to publish in "English" and thus won't be paying for the premium chapters. THAT SAID, it's an interesting read. You should definitely read it before you have an opinion on it.

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