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2020-10-26 19:14

First of all, I love the way how you've written the setting! The writing quality is alright although I think the transition can be a little less awkward. Seeing as this is only the first five chapters, I haven't seen much of the other characters. Nevertheless, I love MC's devotion to her family. Meanwhile, her father is the character I dislike the most (lol). Great job! I'll be waiting for more :>

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