webnovel
goldenchild725
goldenchild725Lv154yr
2021-03-20 14:27

Your story is incredibly good. Writing Quality: Your writing quality is good. It's just that there are some problems with capitalisation of certain words, sentence structure and spelling. You do have a good grasp of your words though. Well done. Stability of Updates: I have nothing to say here. Story Development: Your story development is steady. You've really grasped the correct pace for a romance story. Well done. Character Design: I do like your characters. It's just that they seem a little too flawless. I would prefer if you showed a little more flaws in their personality or appearance. World Background: I have nothing to say here.

Liked by 3 people

LIKE
empty img

No replies. Be the first!

Other Reviews
BlaccLotus
BlaccLotusAuthor

AUTHOR's UPDATED REVIEW. AMOROUS DEVOTION is a short (18+) romance novel with an erotica subplot. A story about passionate relationship between mature woman and her young seductive lover. WHAT TO EXPECT 1. Equally Strong Woman and Man. Female lead and male lead are both dominant over the other. This is the story where the obsessive and possessive male lead met his match, an extremely charismatic and regal woman. 2. Not A Sweet Romance. I wouldn't say that the story is about a sweet romance. This novel isn't that kind of "Destined Love" stories. You might be disappointed if you're expecting a sweet and fluffy romance in this book. 3. Amorous and Hot Male Lead. A natural born womanizer. Julian Long is definitely not that kind of perfect husband material male lead. He is a man whose smile is enough to get any woman wet. Although he is a womanizer, he knows how to respect and treat women well. 4. Mature and Capable Female Lead. Cassandra Qin is a mature woman, both mentally and physically. She had experienced a lot in life and is a single mother. She is a renowned businesswoman who stands at the peak of her career. 5. Mature Relationship. The mature here isn't all about the a.d.u.l.t relationship. Both leads would be pictured as a.d.u.l.t individuals who have their own complicated life. Thus, do expect a mature relationship and mature communication. 6. Slow Burn Romance. Love might bloom late for them or maybe not at all. 7. A lot of hot MAKING OUT sessions. There would be a lot of steamy encounters and intercourses. Given that both of them are extremely experienced, it would be hella Hot. WHAT NOT TO EXPECT 1. Weak to Strong Characters. Cassandra is a successful and renowned businesswoman who stands at the top of her life while Julian is a superior individual and extremely capable heir of the most prominent household. Both lead were born gifted and superior. 2. Unbalance Relationship. If you're into that kind of romance where male lead/female lead is clearly dominant over the other, or that kind of head over the heels male lead/female lead. This book isn't for you. 3. Expected Ending. Expected the unexpected. Happy, bittersweet or even sad ending are all possible. Just so you know I'm quite a hopeless romantic. 4. Good grammar and writing. My writing is quite crap so deal with it. Do expect a plenty of grammatical errors throughout the story. I could only say that I will try my best to improve. 5. Scheduled Updated Stability. I'm pretty snow as snail at writing, so it would be around one chapter per week. The book itself is quite short. I'm planning to end this book around 120-150 chapters. Although I couldn't guarantee you an expected blissful ending like most of books. I could assure you that this book is about a womanizer who would find himself changing slowly, becoming a better lover. He would end up becoming a faithful and loving husband. This story is very close to me. I do wish my grammar and writing would be capable enough for me to tell the story. Here's the leads' illustration to give you more visual.

MatchaMilk
MatchaMilkLv4

The first thing that stands out is the beautiful, beautiful, beautiful writing. It flows nicely and is immensely descriptive, capable of immediately pulling the readers in and enchanting them. I cannot stress enough how much I like the writing style (although there are some mistakes but with some editing they'll disappear). This gorgeous writing style is necessary to pull off this story successfully as it is. The pace of the story is great, neither too slow nor too fast. It follows the characters nicely and we can get insights into their minds which I highly appreciate. This whole novel in general has, I dont know how to describe it, an elegant vibe to it. For some reason, I feel fancy while reading like a dignified lady. The chemistry between the leads is just wow, sparks and very sultry. The female lead is amazing, strong and independent and I also really like Aveline. They compliment each other well, as mother and daughter (and looking at author's review, yep, yep Aveline is so pretty, she's already my fav hehe) and I do hope Aveline has a chance to find her own ML. The ML here is very hot, I do have to say more on the typical cold and overbearing side but its undeniable how attractive he is. He's quite frivolous and dominant at the beginning but I guess later on in the story, he'll be perfect for cassandra. The only thing I have to point out is that the chapters might be a bit too long. Well, what else can I say about this novel than its absolutely gorgeous. A read that will hook you from the first sentence and you won't regret a single second reading it. Sincerely, this is one of the best webnovels I have read yet and I absolutely adore it!

Billy_Castellanos
Billy_CastellanosLv10
Jo_J
Jo_JLv13
Related Stories

His Mistress is His Ex-Wife

[Warning: R18+] "Her Greatest Revenge--Seduce him, Break his marriage, Steal his fortune, and lastly... DUMP him." ***** Sabrina Williams' life crumbles after discovering her husband's deceit and the underhanded acquisition of her family's fortune. Presumed dead after a tragic incident, Sabrina reemerges five years later with a new identity and a burning hunger for revenge. Her return sparks romantic chaos amongst the CEO's inner circle, a dazzling array of handsome bachelors vying for her attention. Sabrina Williams finds herself at the center of a romantic whirlwind with unexpected contenders– her protective best friend, a powerful Mafia Boss, and her possessive ex-husband. The stage is set for a pulsating tug-of-war—a clash of love and revenge with emotions running high. The players are all in, and the game is just getting started! ***** When her scandal with her Ex-husband spreads on the internet, bashers curse her tagging her as Shameless Mistress, Worthless Homewrecker, and Evil Slut... however several mighty bachelors unite to defend her. CEO of Top Fashion Company: "Haters go to hell! PS: to those models who antagonized my Goddess, I hereby take our brand sponsorship from them." President of the Largest Entertainment Company: "Fake news! We will take legal action for slandering my Goddess! Artists who cursed her will be banned from my company." Vice Chairman of Biggest Hotel and Resort Company: "Shut up, Bashers! Don't ever step in one of our hotels and resorts!" Domineering Mafia Boss: "Back off! Erase those malicious comments, or else my gang will hunt you down. I'll kill everyone who dares ridicule my Queen! Everyone: "..." Then a confession comment suddenly pops up amidst the chaos. FL's Best friend: "Everyone can hate you but I'll always be there for you. Sabby... I love you... I've been loving you since our childhood years... My first love... and my last." Her ex-husband can no longer stay quiet and declares to the public. Possessive Ex-husband: "She's not my mistress. She's my legal wife." FL Friend Lanny: "Legal Wife your Ass! Crazy Jerk just die!"

ellezar_g · Urban
4.5
309 Chs

Rebirth in the 80s: The Scholar Wife is Cute

Deceived into marriage, exploited for a lifetime as a nanny without pay, and finally beaten to death by her adoptive mother in front of her adoptive father's sickbed, Shen Mianmian's miserable life came to an end. When she opened her eyes again, she found herself back at fifteen. Shen Mianmian vowed to escape her past fate, punish her malicious cousin and adoptive mother, but accidentally shone too brightly in the process. The third-to-last student in school suddenly rose to the top, becoming the candidate fought over by prestigious universities, causing a sensation among all the teachers and students... While others were busy studying, Shen Mianmian was busy starting small businesses to make money... While others were preparing for the college entrance exams, Shen Mianmian purchased the two most notorious haunted houses in Beijing in one go... becoming an oddity in everyone's eyes, they mocked her that even if she had the fortune to buy them, she might not have the life to live in them. While others graduated and were busy looking for jobs, the haunted properties purchased by Shen Mianmian were requisitioned by the government, earning her a considerable amount of demolition compensation. Those who had mocked her couldn't help but slap themselves twice... inquiring everywhere where there might be haunted houses for sale. Shen Mianmian, originally needing to borrow money for tuition fees, used the demolition funds and leveraged her rebirth advantage to buy a suitable plot of land and built a rental building, transforming into a Beijing's wealthiest and most prosperous landlady... One day, Shen Mianmian, carrying a bag of keys and having just collected the rent, was dragged to the Civil Affairs Bureau. "Shen Mianmian, it's time for you to pay back what you owe me."

Yin Family's Sixth Child · Urban
3.8
1087 Chs

My Billionaire Ex-Husband Chase Me Back

[COMPLETED] Arabella Donovan sacrificed her youth solely for her husband. However, he divorced her because she could not bear children for him, causing her great pain. Bella decided to disappear from his life. Five years later, she returned to the country with her adorable son. Her peaceful life started to get disturbed when her ex-husband chased her back the moment he found out she was giving birth to his son. But now, she wasn't the same Bella she used to be. She is an entirely different person. ***** "Boss, she's back!" "Who?" Tristan Sinclair asked while scribbling his signature across stacks of papers. "Your wife—" The assistant hesitated, watching Tristan closely. When he saw Tristan's furrowed brows, he corrected himself. "Sorry, I mean your ex-wife, Ms. Donovan. She's returned with a boy..." Tristan sighed, eyeing the contract before him.  After five years of searching, only to find out she's moved on, it feels hurt. But he couldn't avoid it. She deserves happiness with someone else. He'll take this loss.  "She deserves a new husband..." Tristan muttered, dismissing his assistant. "Boss, what I meant was the cute little boy. I think he's around four years old—" Tristan snapped. His head up, fixing his sharp gaze on his assistant. "I need you to arrange a DNA test for the kid. And get me her address!"  A glimmer appeared in his eyes as a smile slowly spread across his face. ______ Author Novel: 1. DAMN! I FALL IN LOVE WITH HIM (Completed) 2. The Bride Of Immortal Crown Prince (Completed) 3. Rebirth: Dancing In My Destiny (Completed) 4. The Billionaire's Genius Wife (Completed) 5. Rebirth As The Vampire Lord's Wife (Completed) 6. My Billionaire Ex-Husband Chase Me Back (Completed) 7. Betrayed by Fiancé, Embraced by Hidden Tycoon (Completed) _____ How to contact me: >> Instagram account: authorpurplelight >> FB Page: Author_Purplelight >> Join my Discord Server: https://bit.ly/purplelightserver _____ Notes: The book cover belongs to the author. Please don't reuse it!

PurpleLight · Urban
4.7
573 Chs

My Beloved Super Fierce Wife

"The new book 'Scolded as the Star of Death, All the Big Shots in the Capital Rush to Spoil Me' is now available!" Also known as "Reborn Era: Getting Rich with the Check-In System." [A physical powerhouse of a female lead vs. a vindictive, sarcastic, and elegant male protagonist] After a laboratory explosion, Lin Tang returns to that impoverished era and is bound to a check-in system. Before she has time to claim the newcomer gift pack, her fiancé, sporting an air of confidence, comes to break off the betrothal. The reason being, he's about to secure a stable job. Lin Tang looks at the ordinary yet self-assured man, parted her red lips slightly and said, "...break it off!" Less than a month later, her ex-fiancé was fired for some reason. Lin Tang took a stroll around the county and became the executive officer of the Broadcasting Station in the Textile Factory. Ex-fiancé's internal OS: Is it too late to reconcile now? - Those times were tough! Despite being treasured by her three big brothers and parents, everything from food to cloth and even soap required coupons... Even living frugally couldn't alleviate the miserable condition. Looking at the black mush in the bowl, Lin Tang fell silent, “......” Thankfully, she had a system! Need anything? Just check in to get it. - Many years later. A handsome man looked at his delicate wife with a fair complexion, managing to keep a straight face as he said, “I heard you could knock out a wild boar with just two punches?” Lin Tang's eyes sparkled, her fingers gently exerting force, and the Enamel Jar in her hand deformed. She responded in a stern manner, “Nonsense! Don't believe those rumors. We're civilized people and can't be that barbaric!”

a visitor from South Flight · Urban
4.3
750 Chs