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goldenchild725
goldenchild725Lv153yr
2021-03-20 14:27

Your story is incredibly good. Writing Quality: Your writing quality is good. It's just that there are some problems with capitalisation of certain words, sentence structure and spelling. You do have a good grasp of your words though. Well done. Stability of Updates: I have nothing to say here. Story Development: Your story development is steady. You've really grasped the correct pace for a romance story. Well done. Character Design: I do like your characters. It's just that they seem a little too flawless. I would prefer if you showed a little more flaws in their personality or appearance. World Background: I have nothing to say here.

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BlaccLotus
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AUTHOR's UPDATED REVIEW. AMOROUS DEVOTION is a short (18+) romance novel with an erotica subplot. A story about passionate relationship between mature woman and her young seductive lover. WHAT TO EXPECT 1. Equally Strong Woman and Man. Female lead and male lead are both dominant over the other. This is the story where the obsessive and possessive male lead met his match, an extremely charismatic and regal woman. 2. Not A Sweet Romance. I wouldn't say that the story is about a sweet romance. This novel isn't that kind of "Destined Love" stories. You might be disappointed if you're expecting a sweet and fluffy romance in this book. 3. Amorous and Hot Male Lead. A natural born womanizer. Julian Long is definitely not that kind of perfect husband material male lead. He is a man whose smile is enough to get any woman wet. Although he is a womanizer, he knows how to respect and treat women well. 4. Mature and Capable Female Lead. Cassandra Qin is a mature woman, both mentally and physically. She had experienced a lot in life and is a single mother. She is a renowned businesswoman who stands at the peak of her career. 5. Mature Relationship. The mature here isn't all about the a.d.u.l.t relationship. Both leads would be pictured as a.d.u.l.t individuals who have their own complicated life. Thus, do expect a mature relationship and mature communication. 6. Slow Burn Romance. Love might bloom late for them or maybe not at all. 7. A lot of hot MAKING OUT sessions. There would be a lot of steamy encounters and intercourses. Given that both of them are extremely experienced, it would be hella Hot. WHAT NOT TO EXPECT 1. Weak to Strong Characters. Cassandra is a successful and renowned businesswoman who stands at the top of her life while Julian is a superior individual and extremely capable heir of the most prominent household. Both lead were born gifted and superior. 2. Unbalance Relationship. If you're into that kind of romance where male lead/female lead is clearly dominant over the other, or that kind of head over the heels male lead/female lead. This book isn't for you. 3. Expected Ending. Expected the unexpected. Happy, bittersweet or even sad ending are all possible. Just so you know I'm quite a hopeless romantic. 4. Good grammar and writing. My writing is quite crap so deal with it. Do expect a plenty of grammatical errors throughout the story. I could only say that I will try my best to improve. 5. Scheduled Updated Stability. I'm pretty snow as snail at writing, so it would be around one chapter per week. The book itself is quite short. I'm planning to end this book around 120-150 chapters. Although I couldn't guarantee you an expected blissful ending like most of books. I could assure you that this book is about a womanizer who would find himself changing slowly, becoming a better lover. He would end up becoming a faithful and loving husband. This story is very close to me. I do wish my grammar and writing would be capable enough for me to tell the story. Here's the leads' illustration to give you more visual.

MatchaMilk
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The first thing that stands out is the beautiful, beautiful, beautiful writing. It flows nicely and is immensely descriptive, capable of immediately pulling the readers in and enchanting them. I cannot stress enough how much I like the writing style (although there are some mistakes but with some editing they'll disappear). This gorgeous writing style is necessary to pull off this story successfully as it is. The pace of the story is great, neither too slow nor too fast. It follows the characters nicely and we can get insights into their minds which I highly appreciate. This whole novel in general has, I dont know how to describe it, an elegant vibe to it. For some reason, I feel fancy while reading like a dignified lady. The chemistry between the leads is just wow, sparks and very sultry. The female lead is amazing, strong and independent and I also really like Aveline. They compliment each other well, as mother and daughter (and looking at author's review, yep, yep Aveline is so pretty, she's already my fav hehe) and I do hope Aveline has a chance to find her own ML. The ML here is very hot, I do have to say more on the typical cold and overbearing side but its undeniable how attractive he is. He's quite frivolous and dominant at the beginning but I guess later on in the story, he'll be perfect for cassandra. The only thing I have to point out is that the chapters might be a bit too long. Well, what else can I say about this novel than its absolutely gorgeous. A read that will hook you from the first sentence and you won't regret a single second reading it. Sincerely, this is one of the best webnovels I have read yet and I absolutely adore it!

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