Review Detail of Phantomfiend in I Am The Anti-Mage
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I want to give a lengthy review to explain that I have grown since I first wrote IAM. However, I changed my mind because I didn't think it would prove anything. I know the first 50 chapters were poor. And also a lot of coercive plots going on all over the place. And I hope that many of you will point out my mistakes so that I can learn to be better. Rather than just saying this and that is not good. There is no detail at all, and that leaves me with no direction in which to improve. I also learned to write with tenses because a reader told me to distinguish between the past and present tenses when writing a sentence. Sometimes, some readers help me remember the stories in the early chapters so that they are in line with the plot. That's proof if you don't just say nonsense. You can help an amateur writer who only has a story in his head to become a good writer.
I Am The Anti-Mage
Phantomfiend
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Hey, I just started the story and I am about chapter 10. Here are some cons, that I want to bring your attention to, even tho you might know them: 1. Grammar and mixing different tenses incorrectly - I saw that you already know about the tenses, the grammar could be fixed quite a lot, by using Grammarly, it has free version, but I strongly recommend to give the few extra bucks for premium if you want to be a writer professionally, as it will help you tremendously at the beginning. 2. Overusing names and honorifics - I understand that Koreans have a strict way of communicating in society with eachother, however sometimes if done incorrectly it can overwhelm the reader. For example, instead of using the English transcription of the Korean word (Imo, Emomma, Hyung, etc) you could use the English word (Aunt/y; Mother, Big brother, or even drop it in some cases). About the names, you don't have to use the same name for a character 7 times in a paragraph. Contextually we can understand it, and still if you have to use a word to clarify who's talking about what you could use a different word or just a shorter version of the name. 3. Plot holes - I don't know if you have explained it in later chapters, but as of chapter 9 there are couple of questions that are unexplained - what we're his powers in the Magical world, how does the Soul affect him, does he have any powers, etc. Now, from what I understand - you have a better quality work from the 50th + chapter, however if you would like an engagement from the readers and new readers you will have to go and fix your earlier chapters. Let's be real - there are better translated works out here on this website, so how would you retain the new readers if you give an inferior quality of work. Also, I see that you couple of times said that you're a beginner author - no, this is your second work and you've been working on it for over an year, and I believe that you've become much better during this time, so no - you're not a beginner, don't use that as an excuse. I want to finish out with the following, I wish you lots of success in your path, I'm sure that you'll make it, as long as you keep your Ego in check and continue working hard in developing yourself and your skills. Good luck and take care. đâ¨
I do plan later for Grammarly premium. I know the tense, it still didnt mean I perfect at it. ^^ I still use the excuse as the beginner author. You said This is my second work. Did you see the first webnovel? There nothing that I gain from it. Honestly. Tbh, if I explain my circumstance why a year webnovel only has 120 chapter only, you might call it an excuse. So, let's not elaborate for more. Like I said before, explaining didn't prove anything here. I think you should judge an author based how many chapter that he written so far. Not on how many story that he did. My Ego? Isn't reader has their Ego too? Well, not quite sure about this. I think it's better to point out my Ego that you think should not exist. Don't beat around the bush. If someone tell me what I need fix it. I do it after I learn and ask to them about it. A vague advice like, "Grammar mistake" is common and useless. Even until now, I never though I'm good with Grammar. And my words structure is still a mess. I prefer for a reader that had their time to use paragraph comment to help me. Rather than use that chance to write "This is wrong, that is wrong."
Thionaak:Hey, I just started the story and I am about chapter 10. Here are some cons, that I want to bring your attention to, even tho you might know them: 1. Grammar and mixing different tenses incorrectly - I saw that you already know about the tenses, the grammar could be fixed quite a lot, by using Grammarly, it has free version, but I strongly recommend to give the few extra bucks for premium if you want to be a writer professionally, as it will help you tremendously at the beginning. 2. Overusing names and honorifics - I understand that Koreans have a strict way of communicating in society with eachother, however sometimes if done incorrectly it can overwhelm the reader. For example, instead of using the English transcription of the Korean word (Imo, Emomma, Hyung, etc) you could use the English word (Aunt/y; Mother, Big brother, or even drop it in some cases). About the names, you don't have to use the same name for a character 7 times in a paragraph. Contextually we can understand it, and still if you have to use a word to clarify who's talking about what you could use a different word or just a shorter version of the name. 3. Plot holes - I don't know if you have explained it in later chapters, but as of chapter 9 there are couple of questions that are unexplained - what we're his powers in the Magical world, how does the Soul affect him, does he have any powers, etc. Now, from what I understand - you have a better quality work from the 50th + chapter, however if you would like an engagement from the readers and new readers you will have to go and fix your earlier chapters. Let's be real - there are better translated works out here on this website, so how would you retain the new readers if you give an inferior quality of work. Also, I see that you couple of times said that you're a beginner author - no, this is your second work and you've been working on it for over an year, and I believe that you've become much better during this time, so no - you're not a beginner, don't use that as an excuse. I want to finish out with the following, I wish you lots of success in your path, I'm sure that you'll make it, as long as you keep your Ego in check and continue working hard in developing yourself and your skills. Good luck and take care. đâ¨
You need read first before making review or commenting something dear reader. You seems the type that write or talk first before thinking what you been written or said. Also, you need to know more about copyright infringement. It's just the name. And the character itself is by far is different. Even blizzard can't sue me unless the character is the same. If name that not even got registered as property can be used to declare me as plagiarist. That mean a son from pro player that I know, need to get sue too, for having the name of Illidan. Geez!
Anemic_Vampire:Magina and stormrage? Too familiar, well not really, infact I know those characters, I hope you didn't plagiarized everything so imma read this
he just wrote ÂŤÂ i hope itâs not , he didnât accuse you of anything. I read 10 chapters, dropping because i canât immerse myself in it and all dialogues are unnatural. Maybe it get better later, but then you should edit up to there. Infos: Plagiarism applies when ideas are copied; copyright violation occurs only when a specific fixed expression (e.g., sequence of words, use of an image) is copied. Both are different
Phantomfiend:You need read first before making review or commenting something dear reader. You seems the type that write or talk first before thinking what you been written or said. Also, you need to know more about copyright infringement. It's just the name. And the character itself is by far is different. Even blizzard can't sue me unless the character is the same. If name that not even got registered as property can be used to declare me as plagiarist. That mean a son from pro player that I know, need to get sue too, for having the name of Illidan. Geez!