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BukanOrang
BukanOrangAuthor4yr
2020-10-30 17:05

Hello, Shameless Author here giving a 5 star review to my own work just like giving myself a BJ. But regardless of that, I think I want to make my own kind of novel which the MC reborn into past and become a richman. So many this kind of genre appeared untranslated wheter because copyright problem or not. But I see the author I'm In Hollywood made another novel Hunting Hollywood which I see no problem anyway. Also if you kind enough leave a review, I prefer good one but someone said that what artist fear is not bad review but none review at all.

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Lucas_Santos
Lucas_SantosLv1

Essa novel está muito boa, eu só te peço uma coisa manda dois capítulos por dia se for muito pelo menos 1 capitulo por dia pra não me matar de ansiedade

DaoisteXHVWb
DaoisteXHVWbLv3

Sube más rápido los capítulos ya que esta buena la historia

BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

you need an editor I read half of chapter 1 before stopping due to quantity of mistakes I love these sorts of novels it's a shame so many people quit writing it

BukanOrang
BukanOrangAuthor

really? that many? maybe i need it, i've been independent so far. do you have any recommendation for free editor or something? i'm broke

BrianG9677:you need an editor I read half of chapter 1 before stopping due to quantity of mistakes I love these sorts of novels it's a shame so many people quit writing it
BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

needs an editor don't stop writing

BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

try reading I am in Hollywood if the pointless *** and references are taken out it would be a great novel but due to authors idiotic fantasy's he or she ruined their story

Bloodthirsty09
Bloodthirsty09Lv11

I just finished reading all the chapters and I must say I like your story very much, still there are some things that I must say :- 1.Dont give up on the novel and try to release more chapters in the beginning because many people don't read those stories which have less than 100 chapters. So keep at it and I am sure more people will pick up the story later. 2.Tone the flirting down a bit, I mean he doesn't need to flirt with every female he sees, looks like he is desperate... 3.I saw the harem tag, if you are thinking of making it harem I urge you not to because this is modern society and nobody really likes harem in modern society, shows that the MC is not loyal enough. 4.You are doing everything right apart form the things that I mentioned so keep writing and I assure you you will get more readers..

BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

I really want to read your story, but am unable to due the errors that are for me jarring it's weird if it was machine translated I could accept the flaws due to being use to it but knowing it isn't, or at least doesn't appear to the mistakes stand out hope you keep writing

BrianG9677
BrianG9677Lv15

please if you decide to include a harem as tag suggests make it realistic for example MC being single with one night stands with a few people before they become globally famous ( wonder woman actress is example of someone MC could meet etc before global success) when MC settles down and if still with harem have it that it's not only actresses could have a lawyer, business mogul could have it that MC ends in 3some with a lesbian couple and they get along etc after

haze184
haze184Lv15

Have you considered having Al produce famous tv shows in the 90s like friends, greys anatomy, and power rangers.

Jokers_Theif_2023
Jokers_Theif_2023Lv12

Dose he become a acter at any point ??

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junfriday
junfridayLv5

First of all, allow me to apologize for the low rating (61 reviews before mine and not a single bad reviews? You have to forgive me to be the first). The normal me would usually go full force on rant and rage in rewiew and comment section with this quality of writing but because I've been so hopeful of having more contemporary, non-Eastern Asian MCs and settings like this so much and the fact that the author has so far been maintaining a healthy stability of updates, I thus decided to give a rare constructive criticism where not only would I specify what's so bad about the story, but also to give reasons why and to offer some suggestion (to my best knowledge). Before we begin, I'd mention general mistakes that you might also found in this story: 1) bland dialogues; where the conversation just doesn't sound real except in Anime 2) lots of 'telling' and severe lacks of 'showing'; "show don't tell" is a rule of thumb that must be taught to every emerging writers where instead of just informing what is happening, a writer must 'show' it because outright telling it is simply called info-dumping, not storytelling. 3) cringy characterizations; from the characters shown so far they are all made of cutout carbon whose personalities is just so unbelievable and too convenient to exist in real life All of these made up the story into something extremely unrealistic--so much for a story set in real life, modern day settings. For these mistakes, however, I can't give much input because I'm an inexperienced writer myself and believe these kinds of mistakes are something that can only be mend with more experiences and self-learnings, so good luck for author with this. Now, I'll start discussing aspects in the story that I found to be simply too much incorrect and shows nothing but author's clear lack of research in a lot of things. FIRST MISTAKE: Hope Institute Orphanage. This is the name of the orphanage where MC grew up. I'm aware that this is a fictionalized orphanage. What is wrong with it is the fact that U.S doesn't actually run traditional orphanage system, they've abolished it since late 19th century and by mid 20th century any orphanage in the US shoud have gone extinct. What they run instead is called foster care system. In traditional orphanage system, any orphans with no relatives or family friends willing to adopt them would be placed in the orphanages and lived there until potential adoptive parents make a visit and decide to adopt any of them. Meanwhile in foster care system they believe that children is better placed directly into a new family in a private house. So for orphans who just lost their parents and aren't directly adopted by their relatives or family friends, they'll temporary live in with foster parents in their foster families' houses until (1) a legible ***** decided to permanently adopt them, or (2) they turned 18 by which the foster parents fulfilled their fostering obligation and the young adults would then be asked to live independently. Actually there are foster cares that operate quite like an institution, like treatment facilities for children with mental problems or clinically disabled, or Children's Houses--where a foster parents take in quite a number of mostly "unwanted, problematic children" (I mean zero offense and I blame the imperfect system for letting those children's life sadly spiraling down out of control), one of the worst type of foster homes where any children in the system would hope not to be placed in. For your information, the vast majority of children being taken care in the foster care system actually aren't orphans; they're either children protected by CPS from parental abuses, parental neglect, children kicked out of their families, etc. Many orphans in U.S. would usually ended up being adopted by their relatives or family friends, those aren't adopted by them would spend just little time in the foster care before the agency found parents that are willing to adopt them on permanent basis because orphaned children are generally seen to be "non-problematic". Infants, especially, are of the most popular to be adopted by parents wanting to adopt children because the adopting parents can rise them from so little and innocent. Actually, some of those institutionish-run houses are even using the name "Orphan" or "Orphanage" but most of the children living there are those abused, abandoned, or drugs addicted and needing help instead of orphans. So yeah, if MC exists in real life, he would have been living with his adopted parents since a baby instead of in institution like orphanage. Also yeah, Hunting Hollywood's MC who was written to have lived in orphanage before going to Stanford (iirc) is a result of author's ignorance too. On a side note, Hope Institute really exists in U.S., it's actually an academy for children with disabilities (like autism or clinical disabilities). (I feel it is quite injustice that I don't write more about the foster care, especially the bad aspects of it but since it is already past my intended point, those who are interested can just google it). SECOND MISTAKE: Serializing stories in L.A. Times. I know in some countries almost every major newspaper actually has a special column to publish fictional works, but in U.S. that is not the case. In U.S., paper media that do publish fictions are only literature/cultural newspapers or magazines (with The New Yorker magazine being arguably the number one dream choice of many writers). L.A. Times never publishes fictional stories. Also, serializing the stories in paper media is such a roundabout way if your aim is just to secure the copyright of your writing. You could simply write them in standard screenplay format and register them for protection in Writers Guild of America (the process is instant, but the validity is just for 5 years however you could always renew them easily) or you can directly mail them (even just the draft version of your story) to U.S. Copyright Office (the process takes time--usually 6 to 12 months--but the duration is lifetime [70 years in general, easily extended if you're still alive when it expires, or depending on its significance your family members can extend it even long after your death]). THIRD MISTAKE: Works in publishing industry and people's reactions make zero sense. He became an instant, debuting, best-selling children's book author by the tender age of 10, yet no mention of press interview request at all, and he could remain so "low-key" to the point that he could succesfully hide his identity despite no confidential agreement mentioned with the publising house or the people from L.A. Times who know of him. Dude this is supposed to be international bombastic news and the media people acted such incompetently that I had to pull my hair repeatedly to remain sane at how off-handedly author deal with this situation. Then... Jurrassic Park book happened. Jurrassic Park novel, if you've ever read it, is so heavily immersed in its biotechnology discussion concerning genetics and DNA that no mentally healthy person who have read the book would ever believe it is written by a ten year old kid, yet it just happened... just like that... and people directly involved with him and knew of his identity never casted any kind of doubt and this one character even went as far as laughing at someone who was amazed by the book because this someone didn't know it was written by a kid like nothing's wrong if a kid even capable of writing that... I... I... am trying to contain my rant so I decide to stop here. I haven't read much into this novel nor I plan to continue from where I left off (10 chapters are already too much for my mind), but the short amount of chapters I read already allowed me to know that this story is just like your regural original stories/fanfics from this site where the new emerging author is actually channelling himself as MC living the author's wet dream as supremely gifted capable of doing absolutely anything and everything in the most perfect and unrealistic way possible with all the girls of all ages attracted to him in the most convenient and unrealistic way possible, while the storytelling itself has lots and lots of works needed to be done to make it worthy to be called an actual story instead of journal-like infodump like it is now. It is disparaging but I hope author can improve his writing quality in his next works. Given his work ethic shown by his stability of updates so far I'm willing to believe he'll always improve himself in the future.

AsianLadyBoy
AsianLadyBoyLv13

I was really enjoying this at the start. The Hollywood stuff was good, the business management stuff was good and even the slow romance start was good. Unfortunately for some reason, the author decided to take a hard left turn with his story and start focusing on other things than what people want to read about. The MC starts to hang out with friends more and it just turns into a slice of life with sprinkles of information of his business dealings and showbiz work. The author even decided to throw in some supernatural stuff into the story. By that point, you start to wonder whether or not you are even reading the same story you started with. I found myself skimming a lot trying to find the showbiz/business stuff because everything else is not interesting at all. When it comes to the romance stuff. In enjoyed the development with the first girl to confess to him but he rejected her. And his first girl he loses his V-card to is some random 17yold wanna-be actress from Europe. But she also rejects him. And he gets all mad and screams at her, then quickly apologizes. It just does not feel good at all. You just don't care about the characters he adds in to the story. It's not interesting and he forces a lot of things that just don't fit and makes you just want to skip all of those parts. If the Author kept it 80% showbiz/business management and 20%romance than this story for me would have been a 4+* book all day. And that's how it was at the start it really had me readying every chapter and not skipping or skimming any of them because it was interesting reading on how he was becoming the best in showbiz and in business. But it eventually stops being that, and the pace of the story slows down. It starts to make you think that it's a slice of life now with some showbiz stuff in it. The character design and story development as well as the world background building takes a huge nose dive as soon as the story starts to go all over the place. I was really enjoying it, and it sucks that I stopped enjoying it. But for me now this novel has lost its "Fun" factor. I no longer enjoyed reading it, it felt like a chore having to do so. And for that, I give this story a 2.8*.

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