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AngelFury78
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2021-04-28 01:06

The characters are interesting if you law magic vampires and werewolves. But this story shows prejudices involved in it. I wonder if more will be written as the story is given in 2 parts. It has twists in the story.The grammar is okay and be gone back over.

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I was really exited as I am this book because it's the first story I came across with a deaf main character so I had to give it a try. I read till the first locked chapter but didn't looked at the number. It should be around chapter 40 I guess... After I wrote this review I noticed that it was quite long so I will put the conclusion I wrote at the end up her ⬇️ so you don't have to read everything in detail. If you still want to, feel free to check out the details ^^ Fazit: You can definitely give this story a try. I think the plot is novel and a great idea. The story is currently missing the last polish to be perfect but it definitely has ambitions and a chance. So if you can overlook some tiny flaws and want to support an aspiring author (just my guess) I recommend you to see/read for yourself. ____________________ Following is my "detailed analysis" 😂 So far I can say the general plot is very interesting but I feel like too much is happening in a short amount of time. I of course also don't like it when the story gets dragged along and without much story development but this is definitely a bit too fast for my liking. But it also could be worse. Give it a try and see for yourself. The writing has some issues here and there. I guess English isn't the native language of the author. Some sentences have a weird grammar or are to long, like two sentences without a dot in between. But it's not that worse that you have troubles understanding the gist of what is going on. If you can overlook those small issues you won't have a problem with it. The characters are very interesting and likable and have each their own quirks as far as I could see. My problem here is that things seem a bit superficial what I contribute to the fact that the story seems a bit rushed. The author probably lacks experience as a writer. The world background isn't very well explained. So far you didn't really need the specifics as its not necessary for the general understanding but there are still some questions so I think a little explanation or introduction at the beginning would be very helpful as we cans see what the author imagines in his/her mind to be the setting. For example the MC was born in the 18th century but the school and their behaviour seems like its playing in today's time. Also are there even normal humans as so far there are only mentioned supernatural creatures living in some sort of community? Is it an alternate dimension/ universe? You can see those things aren't nessesary to know but still leave the reader hanging with a few little questions. The story would seem "richer" and "fuller" or more complete with those informations. Maybe you get what I mean. I can't say much about the updating stability as I read this far in one sitting...

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