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Winzentwinni
WinzentwinniLv153yr
2021-04-29 03:35

I was really exited as I am this book because it's the first story I came across with a deaf main character so I had to give it a try. I read till the first locked chapter but didn't looked at the number. It should be around chapter 40 I guess... After I wrote this review I noticed that it was quite long so I will put the conclusion I wrote at the end up her ⬇️ so you don't have to read everything in detail. If you still want to, feel free to check out the details ^^ Fazit: You can definitely give this story a try. I think the plot is novel and a great idea. The story is currently missing the last polish to be perfect but it definitely has ambitions and a chance. So if you can overlook some tiny flaws and want to support an aspiring author (just my guess) I recommend you to see/read for yourself. ____________________ Following is my "detailed analysis" πŸ˜‚ So far I can say the general plot is very interesting but I feel like too much is happening in a short amount of time. I of course also don't like it when the story gets dragged along and without much story development but this is definitely a bit too fast for my liking. But it also could be worse. Give it a try and see for yourself. The writing has some issues here and there. I guess English isn't the native language of the author. Some sentences have a weird grammar or are to long, like two sentences without a dot in between. But it's not that worse that you have troubles understanding the gist of what is going on. If you can overlook those small issues you won't have a problem with it. The characters are very interesting and likable and have each their own quirks as far as I could see. My problem here is that things seem a bit superficial what I contribute to the fact that the story seems a bit rushed. The author probably lacks experience as a writer. The world background isn't very well explained. So far you didn't really need the specifics as its not necessary for the general understanding but there are still some questions so I think a little explanation or introduction at the beginning would be very helpful as we cans see what the author imagines in his/her mind to be the setting. For example the MC was born in the 18th century but the school and their behaviour seems like its playing in today's time. Also are there even normal humans as so far there are only mentioned supernatural creatures living in some sort of community? Is it an alternate dimension/ universe? You can see those things aren't nessesary to know but still leave the reader hanging with a few little questions. The story would seem "richer" and "fuller" or more complete with those informations. Maybe you get what I mean. I can't say much about the updating stability as I read this far in one sitting...

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Winzentwinni
WinzentwinniLv15

So I checked I read till chapter 22 and apparently the novel is already completed so of course no new chapters and upload stability to speak off

Shirabe
ShirabeLv5

you wrote exited not excited... English is not your first language either? English is rather inconsistent with spelling.

Winzentwinni
WinzentwinniLv15

It's not my first language but this should be a typo because I know what excited is and how to spell it. But sometimes I write too fast or my writing can't keep up with my thoughts so these things happen πŸ˜… sometimes when I come across some of my old comments and I see that I replaced things with thinks or the other way round I cringe and that's because I know really well when to use whta πŸ˜†πŸ˜‚

Shirabe:you wrote exited not excited... English is not your first language either? English is rather inconsistent with spelling.
Kiarajones117
Kiarajones117Lv12

Hi, I just want to say thank you for reading my story. English is my native language lol im from New York City. It's just that when I inserted my story from another site the format got messed up. It took me two years to actually write this book lol. But it is still under construction I just haven't had the time to sit and edit it. Thanks so much for the thorough feedback I truly appreciate it. πŸ₯°

Stephanie_Lamons
Stephanie_LamonsLv15

when will more chapters be added I've read to 95 & That's where it stops. please let me know if your truly done as I feel it's incomplete. I would love to read more & hope you haven't just dropped it.

Winzentwinni
WinzentwinniLv15

It states that it's completed so considering you saying that the plot isn't finished it's dropped

Stephanie_Lamons:when will more chapters be added I've read to 95 & That's where it stops. please let me know if your truly done as I feel it's incomplete. I would love to read more & hope you haven't just dropped it.
Stephanie_Lamons
Stephanie_LamonsLv15

so you left her hoping she'd get her eye sight back by the next morning? because that's the last sentence on chapter 95, so that's leaving her blind too. Is there another book to it that picks up from there? There's a lot of unanswered questions that's why I was asking because I've read several books that said they were completed but they kept adding but if you say it's complete then ok but I feel like I've missed something because you left her deaf & blind but there was a chance of her getting her hearing back but then again I read the last chapter well over 2 months ago so it is kinda foggy as I've read 6 other books since then. I did love the story tho, immensely! I just felt that it was fixing to lead somewhere else especially with the last line, her bugging her mom and hoping she'd have her eyesight back to normal by the next day, but. .. ok... sorry if I offended you in the last inquiry , that was not my intention but your response was rude but your the author so if you say it's done then I guess it is. have a great rest of your week & thank you again for your response although I did ask the same thing over 2 months ago when I read the last chapter but never got a response.

Winzentwinni
WinzentwinniLv15

First off all I am not the author! I replied to you because you commented this under my review of the book. After rereading my comment I understand why you consider it rude having in mind I am the author. Without this title I think my answer is pretty normal. As a very peaceful and harmonious person I was very shocked thinking someone was really offended by my comment. Glad this should not be the case. I just informed you about my thoughts to the situation. Hope the misunderstanding here is cleared. Also I didn't read as far as you. The author once commented my review so maybe you can reply to her comment directly. But I am not sure if she answers your question because the novel is obviously dropped. I hope you have a nice day and weren't too unhappy about "the authors" response (mine) previously ^^ Stay healthy πŸ’œ

Stephanie_Lamons:so you left her hoping she'd get her eye sight back by the next morning? because that's the last sentence on chapter 95, so that's leaving her blind too. Is there another book to it that picks up from there? There's a lot of unanswered questions that's why I was asking because I've read several books that said they were completed but they kept adding but if you say it's complete then ok but I feel like I've missed something because you left her deaf & blind but there was a chance of her getting her hearing back but then again I read the last chapter well over 2 months ago so it is kinda foggy as I've read 6 other books since then. I did love the story tho, immensely! I just felt that it was fixing to lead somewhere else especially with the last line, her bugging her mom and hoping she'd have her eyesight back to normal by the next day, but. .. ok... sorry if I offended you in the last inquiry , that was not my intention but your response was rude but your the author so if you say it's done then I guess it is. have a great rest of your week & thank you again for your response although I did ask the same thing over 2 months ago when I read the last chapter but never got a response.
Stephanie_Lamons
Stephanie_LamonsLv15

I do apologize for misunderstanding you as the author, as I did think you were. I have not had a response that I'm aware of from the author to any of my comments. thank you for clarification on all topics as I am like you a Very peaceful person and was taken back by the comment and I did reread it multiple times before I commented, I even showed it to my BF who took it the same as I but I am very glad to know it wasn't meant that way. hopefully we are good on all fronts & hopefully the author will respond & shed some light regarding my inquiries. thank you again & sorry for mistakenly thinking you were the author. I hope you have a great day! oh and please continue reading if you haven't finished yet, it really is an amazing book, I'm sure once you get to the end of chapter 95 you will be left feeling as I do. again have a great day & happy reading to all!

Winzentwinni
WinzentwinniLv15

Haha it's alright. After the initial shock I find it quite funny to be honest πŸ˜‚ and please don't show off your BF, I'm single πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‹πŸ˜‚ To the story: to be honest I quite liked it too. I first picked it up mainly because the MC is deaf and I was exited how this would unfold. I only read till chapter 21 or so (the last free chapter). Although I likes the plot so far it was way too fast paced for my liking (see in my review above). At that time I didn't know the story was already discontinued because I never look at this and later I just thought it was completed. But I'm somewhat glad now not continuing it because I hate it when things don't end. It's worse than just stop reading a story midway because my mind would endlessly keep circling around what could have happened further and the more you are into the story the worse it gets. So long story short but I'm sorry I won't read further no matter how amazing it is πŸ˜… but thanks for your reminder. It just proves that it's getting better and better ☺️ I still wish you a good day ^^ I had a nice time chatting with you today πŸ’œβ˜ΊοΈ

Stephanie_Lamons:I do apologize for misunderstanding you as the author, as I did think you were. I have not had a response that I'm aware of from the author to any of my comments. thank you for clarification on all topics as I am like you a Very peaceful person and was taken back by the comment and I did reread it multiple times before I commented, I even showed it to my BF who took it the same as I but I am very glad to know it wasn't meant that way. hopefully we are good on all fronts & hopefully the author will respond & shed some light regarding my inquiries. thank you again & sorry for mistakenly thinking you were the author. I hope you have a great day! oh and please continue reading if you haven't finished yet, it really is an amazing book, I'm sure once you get to the end of chapter 95 you will be left feeling as I do. again have a great day & happy reading to all!
Kiarajones117
Kiarajones117Lv12

Oh goodness I am truly sorry .I didn't even see that you guys commented a month ago because I wasn't notified. There is a second book that is added called The Blind Vampire and I was told by my editor to add it to the first book and let you guys know it is a second book. It's also about Astrids daughter who is blind in one eye .The book is not finished but if you would like to read any of my other stories please feel free to follow me on inkitt. My name on there is Kiara A. Jones. Thanks so much for the feedback and kind words and yes I am the author lol.πŸ₯°

Winzentwinni:Haha it's alright. After the initial shock I find it quite funny to be honest πŸ˜‚ and please don't show off your BF, I'm single πŸ˜‰πŸ˜‹πŸ˜‚ To the story: to be honest I quite liked it too. I first picked it up mainly because the MC is deaf and I was exited how this would unfold. I only read till chapter 21 or so (the last free chapter). Although I likes the plot so far it was way too fast paced for my liking (see in my review above). At that time I didn't know the story was already discontinued because I never look at this and later I just thought it was completed. But I'm somewhat glad now not continuing it because I hate it when things don't end. It's worse than just stop reading a story midway because my mind would endlessly keep circling around what could have happened further and the more you are into the story the worse it gets. So long story short but I'm sorry I won't read further no matter how amazing it is πŸ˜… but thanks for your reminder. It just proves that it's getting better and better ☺️ I still wish you a good day ^^ I had a nice time chatting with you today πŸ’œβ˜ΊοΈ
Kiarajones117
Kiarajones117Lv12

Oh goodness I am truly sorry .I didn't even see that you guys commented a month ago because I wasn't notified. There is a second book that is added called The Blind Vampire and I was told by my editor to add it to the first book and let you guys know it is a second book. It's also about Astrids daughter who is blind in one eye .The book is not finished but if you would like to read any of my other stories please feel free to follow me on inkitt. My name on there is Kiara A. Jones. Thanks so much for the feedback and kind words and yes I am the author lol.πŸ₯°

Stephanie_Lamons:I do apologize for misunderstanding you as the author, as I did think you were. I have not had a response that I'm aware of from the author to any of my comments. thank you for clarification on all topics as I am like you a Very peaceful person and was taken back by the comment and I did reread it multiple times before I commented, I even showed it to my BF who took it the same as I but I am very glad to know it wasn't meant that way. hopefully we are good on all fronts & hopefully the author will respond & shed some light regarding my inquiries. thank you again & sorry for mistakenly thinking you were the author. I hope you have a great day! oh and please continue reading if you haven't finished yet, it really is an amazing book, I'm sure once you get to the end of chapter 95 you will be left feeling as I do. again have a great day & happy reading to all!
Kiarajones117
Kiarajones117Lv12

Lol, that's alright I appreciate you even reading it in the first place. So thanks again and P.s im single as a pringleπŸ˜‰πŸ€£

Kiarajones117:Oh goodness I am truly sorry .I didn't even see that you guys commented a month ago because I wasn't notified. There is a second book that is added called The Blind Vampire and I was told by my editor to add it to the first book and let you guys know it is a second book. It's also about Astrids daughter who is blind in one eye .The book is not finished but if you would like to read any of my other stories please feel free to follow me on inkitt. My name on there is Kiara A. Jones. Thanks so much for the feedback and kind words and yes I am the author lol.πŸ₯°
spicy_ginger93
spicy_ginger93Lv2

I haven't started reading yet but it already sounds intriguing! can't wait to read it

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