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KristineElias
KristineEliasLv24yr
2020-11-30 18:31

This is honestly a good read, though, you need to check on tenses, grammars and when to use punctuation marks. Besides those tiny mistakes, this book really gives off a BL complicated love story with a tad bit of action. Hope to see more.

Phantom of a Devil (BL)

sharrnister
4.7
80 Chs

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sharrnister
sharrnisterAuthor

Thank you for pointing it out 😊

4yr
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Amateur_Author
Amateur_AuthorLv5

The story starts with the author describing the ambience which is spot on. Towards the end of the first chapter alone i had goosebumps. The story is fresh . Good work Author. Keep up the good work👍

4yr

Scriptamagina
ScriptamaginaLv10

Good job, Author! You exploded my mind about the scene you're writing in every chapter. I keep on reading and here's my concern. Where is the other chapter? Hehe, I can't wait to read your new update. Fighting!

4yr
Brian_Hanes_117
Brian_Hanes_117Lv1

I think the description in this story is better than most of the works that I have read. The writing could use some work at times, but it's solid overall. The story does a good job of getting readers' attention quickly and steadily building up tension. It is action-packed, especially as the story progresses.

3yr
SolAce
SolAceLv3

I think this book has potential to become exceedingly popular ! The characters are intriguing with the mystery of their origins. Plus, this deity system is worth noting, which I believe is your selling point, as it is what makes your novel different for me. The only thing that throws me from immersing myself fully is the grammar: run-on sentences, wrong grammar tense, and a few strange parts that I would find confusing. I tried to point some out to you, but do know I wasn’t able to recorrect everything. If you have discord, I could probably dm you there and clarify myself since it is a bit difficult to correct stuff in the app. Reason I didn’t give world background 5 stars was because I was momentarily on the wrong track of thought when I read So Eun’s point of view. Maybe I still am, which is another thing that prevents me from immersing fully. However, author, don’t get discouraged ! I’ve seen plenty of stories, and your potential is worth reading ! Don’t stop improving !

4yr
Nattychris_22
Nattychris_22Lv10

I'm not a BL fan but this story hooked me. The story kept me on going to read more and more, it's an interesting one. Love the characters, they had their own personas. Great job, author! Keep it up! 💪🏻💪🏻💪🏻

4yr
Vidit_Verma
Vidit_VermaLv4

Enjoyed Reading all the Chapters so far . Desperately waiting for the upcoming chapters to come [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

4yr
Andru_9788
Andru_9788Lv4

Wow found a new obsession 😍. I especially love the tough MC Han Min. His intriguing and dark. Please come up with the good work dear author. Sincerely craving for more.

4yr
midnight_bloom
midnight_bloomLv13

Great premise. Story has potential and I'm excited about it. I just noticed that there's change of POV in the middle. I would suggest to stick to only one throughout. Also be careful of tense changes. Those are just minor findings that could still be improved. Content is already good. All the best, author. 👍

4yr
clydieM
clydieMLv2

I love the story. I don’t usually read BL but this time, I think I will. Keep it up Author!

4yr
moonbceyy
moonbceyyLv1

I absolutely loved the plot! At first, I don't understand it because the words were really difficult but that's a good sign, to be honest. You built the plot well and I think it could go well throughout the entire novel. I loved how every character developed as well! Good job and keep up the good work!

4yr
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