Review Detail of Eternal_Ouroboros in Death in Remnant
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This has got to be one of my favorite RWBY+crossover fan fictions out there no jokes. I haven't seen anything like it anywhere else, and what's been created here is something I will cherish and enjoy for a long time to come. Now, let's get on with the review. THERE ARE **MINOR** SPOILERS, SO READ AT YOUR OWN DISCRETION [Writing Quality]: Though at the start the writing quality is a bit off, through the chapters it actually gets better. The structure gets better, the grammar gets better and the entire chapters start to become smoother and smoother as they go. So I'm a happy reader, seeing an amazing story get improvements. Author-san, thanks a lot and keep it up!! [Stability of Updates]: I'm not gonna lie, I never care about update stability, I'll give it a five anyways since I believe this story deserves a five fûcking star review. [Story Development]: The story development is beautifully done, with the point of view changes happening quite regularly, you'd think it'd be a broken and confusing development, but that couldn't be further from the truth. You get to know each of our four main characters as the story progresses, you get to understand their feelings and how their personalities work, and you get to follow them as they all encounter important characters of the original story and somehow go about saving them. You get to witness something you ever rarely see on this site, the smooth weaving of many characters' lives. I love this novel. [Character design]: I very much enjoyed the character design for this novel's characters. Not only for our main characters but also for the canon characters, specifically the canon characters though as they're very well written out and still feel like they're well fleshed out. They act like you'd think they would, they have the same personality as they do in the show with the exception of those who's paths were drastically changed. But even then, when you think it through, they do still act in character, or at least to me they do. Cinder still feels like Cinder even though she isn't a psychopathic power hungry killer, albeit still strong willed and eager to prove her strength, through small details like these, the characters that have changed paths still feel like they are acting the way they should. Well done!! [World Background]: Not much to say on this, it's fleshed out properly with added details when the plot demands it. Over all it's another aspect of this novel that's been well done. Highly recommend this to anyone who's a fan of RWBY!!
Death in Remnant
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Just thought I'd shamelessly add that in the latest chapter 27 (The Sword), I added a payoff for something I alluded to almost as soon as the MC appeared in Remnant. Spoiler warning for those that haven't read all the way through chapter 27. Death got his hands on a gods weapon, which if activated can cause immense and irrecoverable harm to Salem's battle potential, but because it requires so much power, and someone too weak trying to use it will suffer immense, and very lethal, backlash, it wouldn't normally be possible for him to activate it. His reaper form, as revealed in his very first battle, runs on wrath energy, and thanks to his semblance, his wrath refills faster then he can use it, and while his Reaper Form is acting, he is immune to damage. He still suffers mental backlash from using it too long, though, and is unable to use it for a long time after he uses it for an extended period of time. So Death actually can activate the sword he just received, it'll just take a considerably amount of time while in his Reaper form, far longer then the time period that he couldn't use it before. Death estimated that he likely wont have access to his Reaper form for decades or even centuries, and that he might fall unconscious after exiting his reaper form. You might call it a slight nerf to him, but it is one that I set up right at the start and I feel like it is one that makes sense.. Additionally, it means that his Doom/Abyss Armor form will be getting more use. You see, I gave him a state/form that was incredibly powerful, but still not completely invulnerable and much weaker then the Reaper Form State, so when in a pinch why wouldn't he go to his most dangerous form? In typical stories an MC might do that, but in my mind that's just dumb, and a real person wouldn't do that, because going straight to your strongest form just makes sense to me. Anyway, giving him the Doom/Abyssal Armor form was another foreshadowing that he would eventually not have his Reaper Form available anymore, so I think that I handled it well. Seeing authors 'nerf' an MC can be frustrating, but I thing that's only true if they do it in a sloppy manner. I've been working towards this since I started this story.