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TaintedMetal
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2021-01-02 09:13

I like what's going on with the setting presented in this story. The world is being shown to us via scenes and proper narration as instead of a giant info dump or in some cases, every aspect of the world being presented in the auxilary volume (like a guide). This novel is a good example of how a world should be shown. It's okay if some parts of the world are being told to us, the reader, but it's best to let the rest of the setting be shown to the reader for painting the picture in their minds. There's only two aspects of this novel I have an issue with: some paragraphs are quite big and massive, so it's best to cut them down especially for mobile readers. There's also the updating. I understand if the author has a lot going on other than writing this story, but if I may recommend, it's best to stockpile on google docs; write and edit the chapters, that way if you want to say, upload a chapter a day, it'll be easier. Stories and their respective chapters take time, and you author, have the basis of a good story. I just hope your schedule is managed especially for the readers who have given your novel positive reviews. Good luck.

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Houraji
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First of all, I want to say thank you for reading the humble story of mine. I really appreciate it and I'm glad you enjoyed it so far I write this story on laptop, more precisely using Ms Word. The way I write each chapter, I couldn't help but to overthink things. I think about how one event will have an impact for the future and what kind of past event that driven the said present event. And that's not only one way, sometimes multiple outcomes. I don't want to rush it, hence I upload one chap/week. But I know the inconvenient, and I really apologize for it. After the exams early this year, I'll try to increase the upload rate. Then, about the overlength paragraphs. It related to "overthinking thing" and since I mostly read and write on pc, I couldn't know the inconvenient for reading such a paragraphs. Thank you very much for the review and the constructive criticisms. It can be my consideration in the future. Thank you again.

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Scyfer
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It's very rare to find a book that implements philosophical reference, these days. Right after I noticed the title of the first volume, I instantly knew if it was based on a work of René Descartes. He was such a great philosopher indeed. As the synopsis says, "The crimson thread will begin to roll... casting its shades of gray." My guess this story would not lead into your typical good guy vs bad guy. No. It would become more complex than that. "Moral Dilemmas" as the author first mentioned in the 21st chapter, and the more chapters will be brought to us, the more it became blur and obscure. The border between evil and virtue will become vague. The MC really fit into this belief. A demon girl who is somehow contradicting to her born-nature. An angelic demon, you could say. But the thing is... not that simple. She seemingly has a helpful, kind-hearted manner, not because she is a demon on the outside and an angel on the inside, but because she thinks... simple as that. Then again, all of it are related to René Descartes works. You'd better read this story firsthand to comprehend what I mean. It's really worth it. As I really love the plot, the written narrative and characters description - from what the characters are doing, body language, behavior, their way of think and et cetera - are perfectly served, especially how the author put his/her own thoughts in some chapters. The grammar however, yet I can understand since the author isn't the native english speaker - so am I - nothing to complain. Despite a few mistakes, the story is still easy to understand. Then last but not least, the author seems worried about the low upload rate compare to other. Here's my little note for you, the author, "Don't compare yourself with others. There's no comparison between the sun and the moon. They shine when when it's their time." In conclusion, keep writing at your own pace, do it at a speed that is comfortable for you. I don't mind waiting a week or so for a single chapter because I know it will going to be ripe. A good chapter and a great story take time after all.

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