Review Detail of Chitawulf in Lucifer's horrors circus

I really love the beginning parts of this novel. There might not be much out yet but what is out is very well written. The introduction is incredibly gripping and exhilarating for an exposition segment. Even though we're simply being told the background of this character, from page one we're invested in his sorrows. Your writing style is very sophisticated. However, there are some word choices and sentence structures that make some sections of the book hard to read. For example, "Mr. and Mrs. Caraballo assured that he was soggy with a foul smell that from the first day that Jonah was taken to that house took over everything" should be reorganized to something like this - "Mr. and Mrs. Caraballo insisted he was imbued with a foul smell that took over everything since the very day he arrived at the house." The action that the foul smell is doing should come right after it in the sentence, if that makes sense. Sometimes you use complicated words that muddle the true meaning of the sentence, maybe use a thesaurus and pick out some simpler, more direct words? Overall good work!