Review Detail of Just_Alan in Forging my Legend in One Piece

As an author you have to make the story believable so that the readers remain invested in the story. Granted this is a fanfiction and you might not be a proffesional author, but due to some things in the fanfiction I wasnt able to continue. Author, you have full freedom on how to write ur MC. But the thing in this story is that MC's motivation, actions and history dont line up. MC is someone who was tortured (gruesomely tortured) while he was a slave and he himself said it outloud that he would slaughter world nobles especially his slave owner when he escapes. But what does he actually do when he gets the chance to do that, he just slashes his slave owners face. I could have bought this if MC was icky about killing, but u just stated a chapter before that he killed so many people while in arena that his kill count was much bigger than pirates. This forces us readers to reason with commonsense as to why he might have done that. Either u should change MC motivation to make it in line with his actions. Anyway try this novel and see if it is for you. I didnt pick up any errors in the writing so that was a pro. I also liked the pacing of the story, it wasnt too fast nor too slow, this is subjective but I liked the pace. I might come back when there is more chapters and if the author improved his MCs character design. Good luck author and Hope u dont feel demotivated by this review and I hope u keep writing, I just wanted to point out some flaws in writing the author could improve on. 😊👍