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GenistLv44yr
2020-09-29 20:25

Temporary score until I decide whether the Author-san is improving or not. The grammar and sentence construction is honestly the worst part. All this novel needs is improvement there and it should see a huge leap in popularity. It's a story of a multiverse travelling OP character so world background is a given for each canon. The MC is kind of weird since he seems to swap between young pervert and old father-type.

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J_Titan
J_TitanAuthor

Yeah grammar is worst part. Nothing is good here. But there is one thing you are wrong here which is mc already travelled through multiverse so most of story will cover part till he reaches s4 of anime. He will revisit previous worlds just for some time if story goes there,that is. Main setting will be dxd world only

JaimeX07
JaimeX07Lv6

why are you saying harem and wish fulfillment when he still has a V card? makes no sense

J_Titan:Yeah grammar is worst part. Nothing is good here. But there is one thing you are wrong here which is mc already travelled through multiverse so most of story will cover part till he reaches s4 of anime. He will revisit previous worlds just for some time if story goes there,that is. Main setting will be dxd world only
J_Titan
J_TitanAuthor

I perceive wish fulfillment as making harem or do whatever he like. If you are possessive of something then you can't let it go. Same thing happened to him, he can't be with girl he had *** with so he never had one.

JaimeX07:why are you saying harem and wish fulfillment when he still has a V card? makes no sense
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GeneralAldrnari
GeneralAldrnariLv5

All i see when reading this story A multi-galaxy level entity doing everything he wants for the reasons to satisfy his vanity. This actions are: 1. Has the capability to save a family, to let the mother be with her daughter but due to his reasons of wanting everything the same as what happen on the story that he once read/watch on screen that he prefer to let the daughter a child less than 8yo below to suffer in the streets and letting the mother know that he is capable to reunite them as family but wont because in his word " Thay would be boring" saying it with a smile. 2. The Mc as a character is already a "lost case". For all the experience that he accumulate to other destructive, decieving, cutthroat worlds that he should be experiencing first hand you might as well think that all the innocent lives, deaths that would have been avoided will be save for him being active but what we got is an galaxy level entity would prefer to have their deaths pave his way to have an "easy" life. 3. Fearing/avoiding the UNKNOWN. For all of his strenght and capability you would have think that his mature enough to feel pity to having knowledge to the people that would be suffering and could be avoided if he set-aside his childish mindset of letting "canon" go and face his challenges no matter insignificant they may be. 4. Overall his character is the same as those power wankers story with a mindset and mentality of a child but with more in depth explanation and development. Writing quality is readible, grammar is understandable with a minor spelling error. Thats just my point of view review of the story.

Ryuu23
Ryuu23Lv5

Hmm ... the author asked his readers for a review. I honestly don't mind, because the author answered my question and I like his work. But making an honest review is difficult because few chapters have been written. So ... I'll just lay out my stream of consciousness, that is, I'll write directly what is in my head now. If I offend someone ... although I shouldn't, I'm not on purpose. If you haven't left yet, I want to say that after reading the description of the fanfic, I was counting on something dull. But I didn't care at that moment. And I started reading ... To my surprise, the work was much better than I expected. I like it. But it also became a cause for concern. What concern am I talking about? The MC will not kill Issei and take his equipment. Moreover, he will make friends with him. 99% of the time I don't like it. I acknowledge Issei's positive qualities. He is ready to sacrifice himself for the sake of his dreams (boobs), it's worth something. But I still hate his presence in fanfiction. Probably ... because I was unable to read the original completely due to Issei's constant thoughts. The hero seemed to me then too miserable, literally a slave to his desires. Caution. Some spoilers. In any case, the author said that Rias and I suspect the rest of the girls will also fall into MC's harem, not Issei. And his screen time will be short. If this really is the case, then it is still bearable for me. Don't get me wrong, I would be willing to read this from the start if it was the mediocre shit I thought of because of the description. But because the work turned out to be good, I was not ready to put up with the plot where Issei gets screen time and a harem. Even if he has a lot of good qualities, I don't want to see him in a funk. Fortunately, the author reassured me. Of course, I would be much happier if Issei never woke up his gear for the rest of the story and just fell out of it. But I'm not the author. In any case, if the author does not quit this job, I expect quite a lot from it. From the MC's prehistory and some reservations, I also expect a big harem, which, in my opinion, is a must in worlds like DxD. Hopefully MC will not change his goal of creating a big family. Hehe. Well, something like this. :)

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