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DaoOfGayLv54yr
2020-10-24 03:27

5/5 I like your fanfics, dear joker. I really do. Now, I must say some things: Jaw's character is something that I at first found a little interesting and different from other characters you wrote before, but it grew on me, it did. Ps: Tags SelFISH protagonist.

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🥰😘... Don't say things like that baka~ It won't make me happy or anything like that!~ *chopper dance*

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For better or worse, it is a completed story. Gonna point out some things so people don't start this only to quickly drop again: - The writing quality is very mediocre. Some grammar errors and the story telling/writing style are meh. Not for people expecting hq stuff, but then again you wouldn't look for fanfictions here if that was the case. - The story development is extremely boring, to the point where I ask myself why I even stuck around past those initial chapters. More beneath. - The character design is also rather boring, with a dearth of good development. - The world background does not make much sense when contrasted with the canon of One Piece. If you could simply get the devilfruit of someone dying by putting a couple of fruits at his side, then the world government would have no need to keep pirates inprisoned in the eternal hell in impel down, and could have long since gathered all strong fruits... Plenty other such plotholes Over-all I would say it is a less than mediocre fanficion. Unfortunately we get told several times more than we get shown in this fanfiction. Most obvious in the case where the author feels he has to basically summarize the chapter and tell us what is 'shown' in it at the end of every chapter. The chapters at times also feel very short and have a bad proportion of chapter to advertisement and other stuff the author puts inside every chapter. Continue reading if you don't mind slight spoilers, even if they become quite clear early on: SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER SPOILER Basically, our MC gets reincarnated into One Piece as a Fishman some years before the Great Age of pirates. Wefollow him on his journey where he aims to grow stronger and later overthrow the world government to take its place without reasonable motivation. It has more of watching a robot do a task it doesn't have a reason to do apart from its master (the author) telling it to do it. Pretty quickly it turns into making Jaw (the MC) the new 'Big Mom' by fathering many children and thus taking the world over with them. A flat 2 stars for the story, but it actually got completed so now it is 2.8. Sorry @HolyJoker but you could use quite some work on pretty much everything that concerns writing a story. Just my opinion tho, I am sure there are plenty who loved it. There were some good parts but given the huuuge slowdown in releases towards the end and the overwhelming amount of not so good parts I can't really remember them.

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