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2021-05-06 08:32

read up to chapters 50, there were some flaws here and there but nothing major and story had a lot of potential except main character thinking which to me does not make sense. he is weak yet expands aggressively by sharing his secrets with any random passerby. this is not an exaggeration, 3 people (absolute strangers) saw him fight in a forest, so they just walked to him and boom he shared his secrets with them and even asked them to invite any of their friends... that's too much for given that he is sharing EVERYTHING and he is weak (it would make sense to create an organization of he could control it or at least have some pyramid setup where not any random joe gets the same goods as the leaders)

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