Review Detail of melancholy_sins0 in Cloven(Broken)

The ratings come down to preference, and perspective, so don't be discouraged by my ratings. But, to make it clear, my ratings of "5 stars" mean that I literally cannot find anything wrong with it. First impression (based on first chapter): The writing style is really similar to S.E Hinton; the simplicity is all you need to "form" a visualized voice of the narrator, and it's never too lacking. Oh, just a heads up, it's not a standard translated novel, with systems, cultivation. It seems to be a romance novel, from the 21st century (I'm assuming). Wattpad fanfiction vibes, is what I'm getting. :D P.S, missing periods are there, and there. After reading all chapters (1-35): Thoughts: Chapter 2: WOOOO***W, who is that right there? Did you really- NOOO. I knew it. Dave was always a bastard. Chapter 3: Trish seems like that crazy girl, who everyone likes ngl. Chapter 4: WOOOWW, grey eyes has the perfect name. CHRISTIAN? YEAH, WHOOP GIRL. THIS IS SERIOUSLY GIVING ME FANFIC VIBES NOWWW. WHOOO, RAIN ON ME. Chapter 5: That's one good mother. Nobody likes two-faced, abusive ladies >:C Her world should end, not Ashley's D:< Chapter 6: Darn, I wished all guys chased me like Christian did. But honestly, Ashley's one tough girl. I would've been pushed to the edge with everything. Chapter 7: Hm... Trish's got that attitude~ I didn't think she was the type to react like that. Pumpkin's a real cute pet name. I'm kinda drooling over it lol. Chapter 8: OH, Trish was upset for an entire week? WOOWW. She must've trusted Ashley a BUNCh. Also, gO GIRRRL. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ YESS ASHLEY HONEY, DON'T LET THOSE REEKING HANDS TOUCH YOUR ARMS. WE DON'T LIKE CHEATING BASTARDS. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Oh, my, lord. Is Christian... An... Overprotective... Guy? AHHHHH, MY WATTPADIAN SENSES ARE TINGLINGG. Chapter 9: I understand Trish, but honestly, I'd find it hard to even talk about it. Not to mention, Ashley's school life seems pretty messed up already. I definitely wouldn't be the type to poke into her business, especially considering all the other factors. Also. May Lily burn in a trash can, wrapped in rip-off satin ribbins (which are actually plastic), thrown into a pit of fire :D Chapter 10: Christian's confidence is everything lol. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------OHHHH MYYY LOOOORDDDDD DID- DID ASHLEY REALLY JUST? YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS GIRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL GOO GET YOUR- oH My LOrD. Chapter 11: I'm surprised Christian can tell she was having a panic attack. I don't even know what to say. Actually, I wonder how Ashley could even get unto a car in the first place. Chapter 12: SO that's why Christian knows. OHHH. Poor guy :C. Also, fibbling's a nice word. Chapter 13: Ashley's talking habits are adorable lol. The story's pretty realistic too :O. Chapter 14: She's going to get drunk isn't she? ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yes, she's drunk, and wow; she's witty. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- LOOKS LIKE IT'S NOT A RAPE STORYYY YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS. Chapter 15: My personal opinion, but I'm getting put off by the "we just wanna help you." Some people probably like that, but I don't really like having noses in my business lol. Chapter 16: YESS CHRISSLEEYYYY. I'm gonna stop here lol. My eyes are screaming from pain :__D So, I'm not double-checking ;D