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melancholy_sins0
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2020-12-24 07:39

The ratings come down to preference, and perspective, so don't be discouraged by my ratings. But, to make it clear, my ratings of "5 stars" mean that I literally cannot find anything wrong with it. First impression (based on first chapter): The writing style is really similar to S.E Hinton; the simplicity is all you need to "form" a visualized voice of the narrator, and it's never too lacking. Oh, just a heads up, it's not a standard translated novel, with systems, cultivation. It seems to be a romance novel, from the 21st century (I'm assuming). Wattpad fanfiction vibes, is what I'm getting. :D P.S, missing periods are there, and there. After reading all chapters (1-35): Thoughts: Chapter 2: WOOOO***W, who is that right there? Did you really- NOOO. I knew it. Dave was always a bastard. Chapter 3: Trish seems like that crazy girl, who everyone likes ngl. Chapter 4: WOOOWW, grey eyes has the perfect name. CHRISTIAN? YEAH, WHOOP GIRL. THIS IS SERIOUSLY GIVING ME FANFIC VIBES NOWWW. WHOOO, RAIN ON ME. Chapter 5: That's one good mother. Nobody likes two-faced, abusive ladies >:C Her world should end, not Ashley's D:< Chapter 6: Darn, I wished all guys chased me like Christian did. But honestly, Ashley's one tough girl. I would've been pushed to the edge with everything. Chapter 7: Hm... Trish's got that attitude~ I didn't think she was the type to react like that. Pumpkin's a real cute pet name. I'm kinda drooling over it lol. Chapter 8: OH, Trish was upset for an entire week? WOOWW. She must've trusted Ashley a BUNCh. Also, gO GIRRRL. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ YESS ASHLEY HONEY, DON'T LET THOSE REEKING HANDS TOUCH YOUR ARMS. WE DON'T LIKE CHEATING BASTARDS. ------------------------------------------------------------------------ Oh, my, lord. Is Christian... An... Overprotective... Guy? AHHHHH, MY WATTPADIAN SENSES ARE TINGLINGG. Chapter 9: I understand Trish, but honestly, I'd find it hard to even talk about it. Not to mention, Ashley's school life seems pretty messed up already. I definitely wouldn't be the type to poke into her business, especially considering all the other factors. Also. May Lily burn in a trash can, wrapped in rip-off satin ribbins (which are actually plastic), thrown into a pit of fire :D Chapter 10: Christian's confidence is everything lol. ----------------------------------------------------------------------------OHHHH MYYY LOOOORDDDDD DID- DID ASHLEY REALLY JUST? YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS GIRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLL GOO GET YOUR- oH My LOrD. Chapter 11: I'm surprised Christian can tell she was having a panic attack. I don't even know what to say. Actually, I wonder how Ashley could even get unto a car in the first place. Chapter 12: SO that's why Christian knows. OHHH. Poor guy :C. Also, fibbling's a nice word. Chapter 13: Ashley's talking habits are adorable lol. The story's pretty realistic too :O. Chapter 14: She's going to get drunk isn't she? ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- Yes, she's drunk, and wow; she's witty. ---------------------------------------------------------------------------- LOOKS LIKE IT'S NOT A RAPE STORYYY YESSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSSS. Chapter 15: My personal opinion, but I'm getting put off by the "we just wanna help you." Some people probably like that, but I don't really like having noses in my business lol. Chapter 16: YESS CHRISSLEEYYYY. I'm gonna stop here lol. My eyes are screaming from pain :__D So, I'm not double-checking ;D

Cloven(Broken)

oyslyness
4.6
67 Chs

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oyslyness
oyslynessAuthor

Oh my god. You literally had me wheezing!! Anyway, Thanks so much for the review. I really do appreciate it.

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oyslyness
oyslynessAuthor

Hey guysssssssss it's me again.  I hope you've all been goooooood and I hope you are all staying safe out there!!!!! I thought of something a couple of days ago and I want all your thoughts on this. I'm thinking of making 'Cloven (Broken) 2'!!!!!! What y'all think???? The story of Ashley and Christian continues.  More set backs More fights More lies More breaking moments New enemies and new loses Can the love they have for each other withstand and surpass all? Is their love strong enough? Is it the real cause of their downfall or was it just an highschool fling all along? Stay tuned and find out more in Cloven(Broken)2 So comment away!!!! And let me know if their story should have a part two. Your comments will determine their future!!!!

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Glenstonx
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Hi author, I read your work, and it was somehow relatable and it was sad, at some point. I was amazed that you can make a story like this, I hope the Mc can find its happiness soon, please make a good ending for this one, I hope you would. Regards, Glenstonx

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rydertheking
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A great read! I will say, seeing how much problems Trish has in her life and how she is moving forward is really empowering! The only thing i'll give advice on is that you re-read what you had written and edit it so that it is much more clearer to read. If you do that then in no time, you'll have a great book! ^_^ from ryder

4yr
tessalovesbooks
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it has been a while since I've read a book like this. But reading this book reminded me that they are people like Ashley out there who are facing what's she facing or even worse. The book is so relatable and I love it for that. You guys should totally read this.

4yr
book_struck
book_struckLv1

Hi. I love this book! I love the way the author uses relatable in the book. I also like the way Trish and Christian try and help Ashley. I can't wait for the next update. Keep it up!!!!

4yr
veronica_nunoo
veronica_nunooLv11

Herr author u are the best. But when I was reading I realized that I have really read this story somewhere actually on this same app just that there were some twists in it but it was the same and it's titled My Mission. But I really loved it . Thanks for this story . Hope you see slot of your books

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popsbooksup
popsbooksupLv1

I love this book!!!! Normally I don't read this kind of books but I'm very happy I stumbled upon this one. The plot is amazing even though a little bit fast, editing is needed and although it has a tragic ending, it's still good. This is definitely a five star book

4yr
Lua_Kai
Lua_KaiLv1

A very enjoyable read. I find the characters to be super relatable and well written. There are some minor mistakes here and there but the story makes up for it.

4yr
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