Review Detail of Tonyorobsky in Alistar Bumblebee

I like the story, but it’s frustrating sometimes. Writing quality could be better. Like not mixing he/she his/her. Some sentences are also weird, the result of a literal translation without care for grammar or appropriate vocabulary. The world background is good, if a little too focused on magic. The protagonist is a little bland. He becomes completely obsessed with magic, so much he doesn’t even have a social life. He spent a whole year without seeing his father, even though they live in the same city!!! Heck, even before that, his interactions with his father were bland, lacking the feelings of family. Now the biggest problem in my opinion: The protagonist is a transmigrated guy... And that important point is wasted. I don’t see much difference between him and a native OC who had some prophetic dreams about the future (alternative to warcraft game knowledge). All important information is forgotten or ignored. The only thing from his former world that he used is jam. Of all the things available to a guy from our world he could use. JAM!!! Another offender is that the mages of Darlaran felt the spacial perturbations of his transmigration, and quickly had someone locate it and check on him. Yet they didn’t have the same reaction for the opening of the Dark Portal. (as if the arrival of an ordinary soul in a remote village would make such big waves in space and magic that they should notice it) It was a cheap way to put the attention of big guys on him.