honestly i believe this is a good story with great potential, unfortunately it is not my cup of tea, for me a story, no matter if original or fanfic, requires logic, much more logic than reality itself, and couldn't find that here. Still people should give it a try before judging. Sorry if there is any mistake, english is not my mother tongue
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