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Mc_Fly4mthCommentedWhen they saw me bow my body, everyone fell silent, but I knew that wasn't enough, so I continued, "If you are still upset, you can report it to the Underground Student Council, and I will come along to be your witness."- Mc_Fly4mthCommentedLooking at these men sitting at the same table as me made me sigh in frustration because they were a bunch of losers from every angle I saw, and what disgusted me the most was their pervertedness that knew no bounds.
- Mc_Fly4mthReplied to AcOu0KinGShe was a beautiful middle-aged woman that seemed to be in her late twenties. Her breasts were way too big. Not to mention she had a loose button, it was as if they would burst out.
- Mc_Fly6mthReplied to Betoran2
some people have weird kinks
This paragraph has been deleted. - Mc_Fly7mthPosted
It just keeps getting worse and worse with each chapter. The main character lacks any "character". And its presence only subtracts from the logic of the plot. We get numerous opinions about the ML, but his actions aren't reassuring. A lacking protagonist, with a significantly bland story combined with a writing style that doesn't fit. Nevertheless, I invite anyone who reads my comment to try it. After all, it may be a simple matter of taste.
- Mc_Fly8mthReplied to Kurdi123
Then stop reading, if you dislike it so much just stop reading.
This paragraph has been deleted. - Mc_Fly8mthCommented"Just a Nightstalker."
- Mc_Fly8mthCommented"We heard you loud~ and~ clear~, mum~." They chimed in unison, "We'll respect him just like we respect Percy!"
- Mc_Fly9mthReplied to Shota_Prince'Must be nice to be that strong.' Void sighed internally observing his carefree demeanor.
- Mc_Fly9mthReplied to Noble_K1ng
do you know the chords of every song you hear?
Then I found the finger style pattern that matched, in that second everything came together to create such a haunting melody that sent chills down my spine. It captured the lyrics of the song like it was made for it. I got lost in the melody while perfecting it, the transition between the pre chorus to the chorus was where the goose bumps needed to hit, and my god did it. - Mc_Fly9mthReplied to UthredofBebbanburg
still not gonna write themselves
"I woke up an hour ago old man, these songs ain't gonna write themselves" He turned to me with a cheeky smile, it's good to see him smile again. - Mc_Fly9mthReplied to aurelienShe is very cute. I wonder how cute she would be with cat ears and a tail.
- Mc_Fly9mthCommented
I think Complete - Jordan would be a good song with the background
I don't need to change myself, just be the best version of me. - Mc_Fly9mthPosted
The story is good, English isn't my first language, so I can't review the grammar. Therefore, I will talk about the plot. Spoilers ahead. It's been 15 chapters, yet the main lead is still a baby and had less than 1 hour of "screen time" As a personal preference, I would have enjoyed it more if we were shown each personality and its perks from the pov of the parents as the prologue. Instead, we got a subject that could cause a crisis for the personalities even before we could create an emotional connection with them. I believe it would have been better to fit small insights into it through the years and let the readers slowly realize what is happening. Nevertheless, it is a good story, and people should try it. I find myself excited to see how it develops.
- Mc_Fly10mthCommentedAi's eye twitched, and she kept a conscious effort to make sure her eyes didn't stray downwards. She knew Jason was a fit person, but she didn't expect him to have the physique of a Greek statue.
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- Mc_Fly10mthCommented"Wheatley, don't make him hold back. Make him go for the kill and remove his gadgets."
- Mc_Fly10mthCommentedXiao Ning Er was barely fourteen year old at this time, but so was Shen Yue. Even if Shen Yue was intellectually older and more mature, it wasn't like he needed to push for having sex with her before she grew up; they could still romance and date. Thus Shen Yue didn't feel apprehension from viewing Xiao Ning Er as a romantic interest, especially in this world where girls already have kids at the age of 14 and people are able to live for hundreds of years. At the very least, he would treat her better than Nie Li.