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GrigoLv41yr
2023-11-19 20:48

usually I wouldn't write a comment on any kind of fanfic , but this deserves one . The pace is really good it's smoothand flows without hurting my brain ,the backroung is great we have an overview about a lot of things that are interesting , our MC is likeable and doesn't act like a moron and if he does its because he's still a kid (and for me it's understandable ) we also have a picture of hiruzen which describes him perfectly as he's neither a bad guy nor an overly loving gramps , he's just incompetent like really . I know a lot of people won't like this FF because it's either "not fast enough" or there's no " harem" or no "romantic interest" let me tell you this is not a fiction written by some kid , don't try to corrupt the Story with your infantile mind.

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Overall I give the story a 2.6/5. If I were to ignore the fact that this is the authors first story, this would be the result. However for a first try I would personally rate it a 3.6 or a little bit higher as its main flaw is the authors inexperience with creating storylines that are coherent and sensible, and characters that feel believable. The author seemingly has potential as long as they properly think out the development of the story. The story has average writing quality, generally unnoticeable mistakes unless you look for them, but a few issues here and there for legibility. Generally the story doesn't captivate or immerse the reader well enough to warrant the full five.(4/5) About two chapters a day, 12 hours between each post. I suspect there will be a hiatus eventually, but that is just a suspicion. (4/5) The story development follows an awkward and sometimes bizarre path of logic, while managing to follow tropes poorly in some cases. An example being the commonly found evil second personality trope, this is done pretty poorly due to the fact that it comes along out of nowhere and isn't developed in a proper way. Another example being the jump in logic Sarutobi makes when sending the protagonist to the orphanage.(1/5) The character design is poor at best, Kakashi doesn't feel like Kakashi, Naruto feels like Generic Charismatic Character Number #612. The main character is also bland and unappealing, in the chapters I have read there has been no underlying goal or ambition set for the protagonist. (2/5) World background unfortunately isn't much better, uses fanfiction tropes for Naruto. Tropes like him getting stoned as a child, which is done especially poorly due to the fact that this is explained when they are four, by which most children even if as strong as a normal adult would have broken bones or dying if hit in the head with a stone thrown by an adult who would probably not hold back. (2/5)

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