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Kamatis
KamatisLv33yr
2021-01-17 21:20

The emotions being portrayed are raw and visceral and I believe that heavily lies at the narrative... Having a good narrative, would mean having a better flow of story, character's emotions etc. And that's what I noticed the most when reading your story... It's not exactly vivid but the words and sentence being used made the story flow more efficiently... I appreciate the narrative... Keep up the good work

The Last Snow: Love Me Once Again For A Year

Mao_Yuxuan
4.9
189 Chs

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Mao_Yuxuan
Mao_YuxuanAuthor

Thanks for your kind feedback! ^^

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Mao_Yuxuan
Mao_YuxuanAuthor

Shameless author here. Thank you for reading this book. Don't forget to leave comments, reviews, or voting for this book. Suggestions and constructive criticism are needed. Thank you. ^^

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Madyan_wani
Madyan_waniLv10

Nothing is more precious than your own experience. I love how beautifully you plotted the MC character and drew our attention. The description is too great that I considered myself in the plot. Keep updating author.More power to you.

3yr
Aeipathy_02
Aeipathy_02Lv11

Reveal spoiler

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Kaaguya
KaaguyaLv3

I'm starting to read it now but it looks good; I can't help mentioning that this novel is very reminding me of the tragedy manga "The ten years I loved you the most", I hope it doesn't make me cry as much as this manga I mentioned did. 😢

3yr
LallunaRyu
LallunaRyuLv10

I like the storyline, it flows and the emotions flow so that we can feel what the main character feels. I like the plot which is very sweet. But, the main character is very weak, like a woman, I don't like it. Hopefully he can get tough with that trash. However, I still give my five star for this book. I hope you can update more often.

4yr
Lexi_Roberson
Lexi_RobersonLv1

With many authors I always recommend grammar checking. Reading yours, I found that it was quite excellent and made the story flows really nicely. I thought the introduction of the character, Park, was really interesting and brilliantly done I might add. Overall very intriguing and highly recommend to everyone. It's not everyday you find a good novel of high quality, and this one definitely represents that. I have read many books, and never one quite like this. I would like to add that I am the user BellsandLexShow from the forum!!! Good luck author!!! I hope you enjoyed this review, you deserve it for a job well done!!!

3yr
_AiRen_
_AiRen_Lv10

Really got a nice prologue and finely crafted story line highlighting events and characterization each with their individuality and development. Nice work author I'll be sure to check out more chapters!

3yr
JustLetMeSleep
JustLetMeSleepLv4

Writing method is wonderful, first person writing is a hard thing to do, the character has depth and from the ending of the first chapter I got the feeling that something tragic is about to happen. Good job author.

3yr
ILLYAchan
ILLYAchanLv5

The story is so good! The description made me sympathize with the mc and his situation is a little heartbreaking. So far, the story is so interesting and engaging! The grammar is nice and has a good flow.Keep it up author!

3yr
Gaureeey
GaureeeyLv1

LGBTQ+ ON A MUCH REALISTIC LEVEL BROUGHT ON PAPER! bruh, this is really worth the read, P.C has a rraly great personality, I'm assuming its a continuation of another book with 403 chapters, right? Anyway, seems really fresh! Its great overall, especially the emotionally weak and vulnerable exposures oooof ! its greaaaTTT

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