Review Detail of Adrianix1234 in In TDG with Bleach System(dropped)

Vergin_till_now:Well not a true...as there's no abandoning...thing. And he does love them....he is just getting them anyway it's possible. He is just selfish

Adrianix1234:Dude gonna be honest, maybe right now there isn’t abandoned in literal sense but it you did in other form, you abandoned her feelings and her good being,your mc isn’t clever nor deep he only thinks about séx, imagine Issei from DxD from the novels, he’s thinking 9/10 about tits, and 1/10 about becoming stronger... to grab rias tits... (and that when he’s not yelling about tits) you could literally grab him, give him a little iq to manipulate people and not yell tits all the time, and replace his obsession with tits to one of getting laid, and we have your mc, everything he does is about his plans on getting laid, or getting points for the sistem... literally just read 12 chapters about him planning to getting laid, eating, sleeping, and getting stronger thanks to the system, Thats it, nothing more, everything he does is parts of his plan to get laid, you couldn’t have created a mc more shallow, even if you tried, he doesn’t love her, she just confessed to him and he pulls the ultra-dick move “i guess you dont really love me” when she refused to have séx minutes after her confession, that was the last straw if i could i would have punch him... you probably think that isn’t much, but that shit happens in real life, were they are confused to steal their virginity, and it’s even worse in TDG because literally every single cultivator that has some familiarity with ning er, can use his senses to feel she lost her hymen (cause there is a type of enery called Vital Ying or something like that, that can be easily be sensed by stroger cultivators than her),by the time she reaches her home the whole city will be talking about her being a slut... and she will be lucky to not get killed or disowned and gifted to the sacred family as a trophy wife... and all that because the stupid mc can’t wait till they are officially compromised to each other... he can only think in getting laid... he doesnt even care about what happens to her after doing the deed... and if it doesn’t happen what i wrote then it isn’t a cultivation novel...

Vergin_till_now:Umm.... I guess u forgot that she's more powerful than the people....i mean I mentioned she can take on gold rank spiritualists....right. That's y i mentioned that.....so that in future no one's able to tell if she's a virgin or not. And well this fanfic is really all about *** so yeah u r right in a sense....n e way Guess it's not ur cup of tea....

dukroger:Friend author, what should bother the other colleague is the way you made the MC act to reach your goals, where the MC was with a reason and manipulative character, I believe that what the colleague expected was that the MC develops his power through the system but also developing their relationships in healthy ways, and I understand that, it is rare to see a story made in which relationships happen in a more natural way, in which despite having *** and everything else that does not become an obsession or something like that, and I understand that this is rare because the emotional and mental maturity of a person to know not to force their desires on others and to make things happen in a more natural way is very difficult to find even in real life, it is a pity that this brings so much unhappiness and false feelings both in real life and in stories, I look forward to one day seeing a well structured novel with these things that I talked about, that and with a good balance of both world development and everything that a Accurate story would make a novel something memorable. I said all this just to see the comments that you two exchanged and for having concluded that you had not understood the reason for the criticisms and what he was criticizing, I hope I helped. Blessings

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dukroger:Friend author, what should bother the other colleague is the way you made the MC act to reach your goals, where the MC was with a reason and manipulative character, I believe that what the colleague expected was that the MC develops his power through the system but also developing their relationships in healthy ways, and I understand that, it is rare to see a story made in which relationships happen in a more natural way, in which despite having *** and everything else that does not become an obsession or something like that, and I understand that this is rare because the emotional and mental maturity of a person to know not to force their desires on others and to make things happen in a more natural way is very difficult to find even in real life, it is a pity that this brings so much unhappiness and false feelings both in real life and in stories, I look forward to one day seeing a well structured novel with these things that I talked about, that and with a good balance of both world development and everything that a Accurate story would make a novel something memorable. I said all this just to see the comments that you two exchanged and for having concluded that you had not understood the reason for the criticisms and what he was criticizing, I hope I helped. Blessings

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Vergin_till_now:Well not a true...as there's no abandoning...thing. And he does love them....he is just getting them anyway it's possible. He is just selfish